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Thu Jun 06, 2013 4:44 pm
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Do you have a piece of prose that you'd like me to review? Leave them here and a review shall come your way*.

I'd be up for following novels too. Bring them in >D


*May need to wait a few days.
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Sun Jun 09, 2013 10:32 am
gauravkundu32 says...



this is a fiction based work.I request you to review this work.php?id=101980
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Thu Jun 13, 2013 6:24 pm
Roundsquare says...



Hi we talked earlier and you said you were going to review my first novel on YWS. Well here it is :)
The Fading - Chapter One
“Nobody's perfect. Well, there was this one guy, but we killed him....”
  





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Sat Jun 15, 2013 4:43 pm
Blues says...



Both done yesterday. Who is next?
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Sun Jun 16, 2013 8:21 pm
peanut19 says...



I don't know if you count Scripts as Prose...since they aren't really the same...but this is a script that I wrote, it's fictional. If you want to take a look, maybe?
In On A Secret

~peanut~
There is a light in you, a Vision in the making with sorrow enough to extinguish the stars. I can help you.
~And The Light Fades


The people down here are our zombies, who should be dead or not exist but do.
~Away From What We Started


P.S Got YWS?
  





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Sun Jun 16, 2013 8:23 pm
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I've never actually reviewed a script but I'll try to get it done by tomorrow or the day after :)
  





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Sun Jun 30, 2013 1:37 pm
Sins says...



Blues, mah main man/duck!

Would you mind checking out the first chapter of my novel for me? I think you actually read the original version I posted way back in September, but I've revamped it now so I'm curious to find out what you think.

The Boy Who Broke Mirrors (Chapter One)

I've also tried editing it accordingly to the reviews I have on it already, so I want to see if I've been at all successful in doing that.

Please and thank you! :)
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Thu Jul 18, 2013 5:05 pm
polinkacreations says...



Hey Blues! Don't know if you remember me, I haven't been around forever, but I am making a 'grand' comeback. Could you review this for me? It's the first part of my 'short' story, and it's actually the first story I actually completed:D Any kind of comments appreciated!

Dreamcatcher & Whistleblower (Part 1)

And of course, if you need anything reviewing, don't hesitate to contact me:)
"Be who you are and say what you feel, because those who mind don't matter and those who matter don't mind." - Dr. Seuss
  





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Fri Feb 06, 2015 11:03 pm
Blues says...



It's been quite a while. Let's bring this back! Now open to requests.
  





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Sat Feb 07, 2015 7:58 pm
Lefty says...



Hi, there!

If you're looking for a novel to review/follow, it would be awesome if you could take a look at my novel The Fighter of Aldea. I've started posting revised chapters and currently have the first five up (split into ten shorter parts). If you'd like to review it, it's totally up to you if you just want to read the first chapter or more. Thanks!

The Fighter Of Aldea - Chapter 1 (Part 1 of 3) - Lydia REVISED
Hear me out, there's so much more to life than what you're feeling now. Someday you'll look back on all these days, and all this pain is gonna be invisible. - Hunter Hayes
  





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Tue Feb 17, 2015 12:40 am
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I'll hopefully have the other chapters done over the course of the week, @Leftywriter!

Who's up next? ;)
  





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Sun Mar 08, 2015 12:28 pm
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Hey Blues, if you could take a look at my short story here. It's pretty long so I can understand if you're put off, but it could do with some help.
Nate wrote:And if YWS ever does become a company, Jack will be the President of European Operations. In fact, I'm just going to call him that anyways.
  





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Mon Mar 09, 2015 3:37 am
yizhongt says...



Hi Blues, it would be smashing if you could review two of my works

Celestial: Spark of War; prologue and chapter one
Celestial: Spark of War; Prologue & Chapter 1

Celestial: spark of war; chapter two
Celestial: Spark of War; Chapter 2
  





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Tue Mar 17, 2015 9:35 pm
Dracula says...



I would appreciate it if you could review Boy Who Cried Wolf.
I bought a cactus. A week later it died. I got depressed because I thought Damn, I am less nurturing than a desert.
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Wed Mar 18, 2015 4:29 pm
psudiname says...



Hi blues, can you review the first chapter of my novel? I'd really appreciate it!

To The Stars Above (chapter 1)
if anyone wants a review, post on my profile and I'll get to it in a couple days.
  








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