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Tue Dec 29, 2015 4:45 pm
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Lightsong says...



Ehehehe. Please review ​The Beauty of Educational Prison! :D
"Writing, though, belongs first to the writer, and then to the reader, to the world.

The subject is a catalyst, a character, but our responsibility is, has to be, to the work."

- David L. Ulin
  





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Thu Dec 31, 2015 9:12 pm
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InfiniteRectangles says...



If you don't mind, could you please review my short story? Born A Harami It is the prequel to another story that I wrote first, and although I think they can stand on their own, I will provide the link for that story as well just in case. The Beggar Boy Thanks in advance :3
"We are, as a species, addicted to story. Even when the body goes to sleep, the mind stays up all night, telling itself stories" ~Jonathan Gottschall
  





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Fri Jan 15, 2016 2:32 pm
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fukase says...



*dropped something*
The Weird Feeling of Separation on the Early Dawn.
I wanna a review from you~
I love Koku.
He is damn cute and should be the main character
and not some lazy old man that supposedly genius but a sucker in his own life.
Koku is Koku.
Koku is CUTE.
~ B-The Beginning (A Netflix Anime.)
  





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Mon Jan 25, 2016 5:35 pm
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Lightsong says...



Hey! I'm back! Please review Serena, the Colours, and the Death! It's a piece I've done a while ago, and I think it needs more review. :3 Oh, and excuse the spacing - I've tried all ways to fix it, but it still stays that way. ._.
"Writing, though, belongs first to the writer, and then to the reader, to the world.

The subject is a catalyst, a character, but our responsibility is, has to be, to the work."

- David L. Ulin
  





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Tue Jan 26, 2016 2:26 am
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Charm says...



I wrote a poem. It's the first one I've written in a long time and I don't think it's that good. I would love to here what you think and I'd love to be given some advice: "I Would Kill Myself"
  





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Sun Jan 31, 2016 12:47 pm
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Sins says...



Hey Noelle!

So basically, I'm re-posting the edited version of one of my novels (The Boy Who Broke Mirrors). You were one of the wonderful folk who reviewed a few chapters of it for me back in 2k13, and so it would be super awesome if you could take a look at the newer version. I've only got chapter one so far, which isn't heaps different to the original, but it would be muchly appreciated.

The Boy Who Broke Mirrors (Chapter One)

I can see you're bogged down with requests atm, so there's no rush or anything at all. Plus only do it if you want to, of course, we don't live under a dictatorship of Skins. Thanks a bunch!
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Sat Mar 19, 2016 4:42 pm
Lightsong says...



I'm currently unhappiness with the feedbacks I've gotten for my poem, and so I'd like to know what do you think about it. Here's The Beeping Sound. Thanks! :D
"Writing, though, belongs first to the writer, and then to the reader, to the world.

The subject is a catalyst, a character, but our responsibility is, has to be, to the work."

- David L. Ulin
  





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Sat Mar 19, 2016 10:12 pm
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NerdBird says...



Hello Noelle!

I'd love it if you could review the first chapter of my novel False Gods! :) It's a Ya/Sci-Fi about a hacker who bites off more than she can chew! There is a prologue but it's irrelevant to the story so you can skip it unless you really want to read it! :)

https://www.youngwriterssociety.com/work/NerdBird/False-Gods--Sunday-Bloody-Sunday-Chapter-1-127981

Thank you! Thank you! Thank you!

:pirate3:
  





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Tue Mar 22, 2016 7:59 pm
Lightsong says...



Request cancelled.
"Writing, though, belongs first to the writer, and then to the reader, to the world.

The subject is a catalyst, a character, but our responsibility is, has to be, to the work."

- David L. Ulin
  





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Wed Mar 23, 2016 2:38 pm
KaiTheGreater says...



Could you please take a look at my two latest poems, Untitled and You and Me and Infinity? Title suggestions for the second (yup, Y&M&I, got it ;) ) would be appreciated. That one's a little more rough overall, but for Untitled I'm mostly looking for input on the style.
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Fri Mar 25, 2016 8:23 pm
Sins says...



ohhidere.

When you're free, could you take a look at the second chapter of my current novel for me, please? As it's not the first, it's 100% cool if you'd rather not, but I'm more than happy to give you a fist chapter synopsis if you are cool to do it!

A Pocket Full of Posies (2)

Please and thank you :3
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Wed Apr 20, 2016 5:19 pm
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Sujana says...



Hey Noelle,

I've been asking people around, but could you help me by reviewing this? Thanks:

The Thing with Wings
"For with much wisdom comes much sorrow; the more knowledge, the more grief."

Ecclesiastes 1: 18
  





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Wed Jun 08, 2016 12:51 am
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Calliope3 says...



Will you please review my poem? Things Which Are Seen
Thank you!
  





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Fri Oct 14, 2016 6:00 am
yakitsa says...



Hello hello hello,
this is my first published work on the website - not afraid to say
I'd really appreciate some feedback!
Thanks.
Life imitates art.
  





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Thu Oct 20, 2016 6:36 pm
XxXTheSwordsmanXxX says...



I can always use reviews on any of my stories. I'll just give you the list. PIck one at random. I don't mind any and all criteque

The Elder Scrolls: Escape ~ Prologue
The Elder Scrolls: Escape ~ Chapter 1.1
The Elder Scrolls: Escape ~ Chapter 1.2 - The Last Straw
The Elder Scrolls: Escape ~ Chapter 1.3 - The Last Straw
The Elder Scrolls: Escape - Chapter 1.4 (Finale) ~ The Last Straw
The Elder Scrolls: Escape ~ Chapter 2.1 - Wildfire
The Elder Scrolls: Escape ~ Chapter 2.2 - Wildfire
The Elder Scrolls: Escape ~ Chapter 2.3 - Wildfire (Finale)
The Elder Scrolls: Escape ~ Chapter 3.1 - Freedom
For the Kindness You Once Showed Me
Tick Tock
Secrets
Would You Like Some Cake?
The Little Wizard
Unlucky Ricky
Escape
A Soldier's Death
The Measure of a Hero
This Bed Is So Cold...
By Its Cover
Winter's Hope
I Am With You
Moonlight Saga: Lost Throne ~ Chapter 1.1 - First Meetings
Moonlight Saga: Lost Throne ~ Chapter 1.2 - First Meetings
Moonlight Saga: Lost Throne ~ Chapter 1.3 - First Meetings
Moonlight Saga: Lost Throne ~ Chapter 1.4 - First Meetings
Moonlight Saga: Lost Throne ~ Chapter 1.5 (Final) - First Meetings
Moonlight Saga: Lost Throne ~ Chapter 2.1 - Look Who Crashed the Party
Moonlight Saga: Lost Throne ~ Chapter 2.2 - Look Who Crashed the Party.
Moonlight Saga: Lost Throne ~ Chapter 2.3 - Look Who Crashed the Party.
Moonlight Saga: Lost Throne ~ Chapter 2.4 - Look Who Crashed the Party.
Moonlight Saga: Lost Throne ~ Chapter 2.5 (Final) - Look Who Crashed the Party.
Moonlight Saga: Lost Throne ~ Chapter 3.1 - Transformation
Moonlight Saga: Lost Throne ~ Chapter 3.2 - Transformation
Moonlight Saga: Lost Throne ~ Chapter 3.3 - Transformation
Moonlight Saga: Lost Throne ~ Chapter 3.4 - Transformation
Moonlight Saga: Lost Throne ~ Chapter 3.5 - Transformation
Moonlight Saga: Lost Throne ~ Chapter 3.6 Transformation
Moonlight Saga: Lost Throne ~ Chapter 3.7 (Final) - Transformation
Moonlight Saga: Lost Throne ~ Chapter 4.1 - No Going Home
Z-Day: It Was a Perfect Day
Z-Day: Load Up ~ Part 1
Z-Day: Load Up ~ Part 2
Z-Day: Load Up ~ Part 3
Z-Day: Load Up ~ Part 4
Z-Day: Load Up ~ Part 5
Z-Day: Load-Up ~ Part 6
Z-Day: Load Up ~ Part 7(Finale)
Z-Day: Nothing Is As It Seems ~ Chapter 3.1
Z-Day: Nothing Is As It Seems ~ Chapter 3.2
Z-Day: Nothing Is As It Seems ~ Chapter 3.3
Z-Day: Nothing Is As It Seems ~ Chapter 3.4
Z-Day: Nothing Is As It Seems ~ Chapter 3.5 (Finale)
  








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