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Tue Jun 16, 2015 7:58 pm
Carlito says...



Done and done! :)
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Wed Jul 01, 2015 8:49 pm
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Updated rules and other fun first post things :)
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Sun Jul 19, 2015 4:57 pm
Lightsong says...



Hey! Please review The Silent Speaker (Prologue). Thanks! :)
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The subject is a catalyst, a character, but our responsibility is, has to be, to the work."

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Mon Jul 20, 2015 7:14 pm
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Finished @Labrador :)
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Tue Jul 21, 2015 2:11 am
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Thanks. :)
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Tue Jul 21, 2015 2:52 am
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No problem! :)
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Tue Jul 21, 2015 5:31 pm
Imaginator17 says...



Hey Carlito! How are you? :D

Link: Seven Swords Chapter 1 - Part 2

Genre: Action/Adventure and maybe a little bit of fantasy xD

Short description of the first part of chapter 1: Two, martial artist brothers adopted by a small village, practice their fighting art daily and live out their lives together, until the whole village is attacked by bandits, as this happens both of the brothers defend the village by fighting against them.

Thank you Carlito!
  





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Wed Jul 22, 2015 2:17 pm
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Hey @Imaginator17 :D I'm doing pretty well - living the summer dream! How about you?

I'm finished with your review (and I did the first part too as a little bonus)!
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Wed Jul 22, 2015 3:23 pm
yizhongt says...



Hey there, it would be nice if you could review

Chalice of Life: Chapter 4

Previously on the Chalice of Life: a powerful artefact named the Chalice of Life is stolen from the deepest vault of a bank. The Chalice of Life is used by a dark figure, but he is displeased by the outcome as the chalice is incomplete. He sends his underling to meet an associate that could help him retrieve the other part of the Chalice. At the same time, a teacher and his friend discovers where the other part of the Chalice might be located.

I'm sorry if my synopsis is not that accurate.
  





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Fri Jul 24, 2015 6:03 pm
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Hey @yizhongt - sorry for the wait! Your review is finished :D
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Sat Aug 01, 2015 9:19 am
Enemy says...



Hey Carlito!

Excellent template you have there, I have something I think you might love to read, it's proving to be going well but more input the better as I'm currently working on chapter 2.

Here are 2 pieces from a novel, they're only short so It shouldn't take too long.

If anything just an opinion or some suggestions would be great.

The Letters I Never Wrote (Introduction/Prologue page)

Then-

The Letters I Never Wrote (Chapter one)


Thanks for your time :)
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Sun Aug 02, 2015 10:32 pm
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Hey @Enemy!

Your reviews are finished :D
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Thu Aug 06, 2015 4:22 pm
elwarren says...



Hi! Could you please have a look at my short story? It's the first chapter, so self explanitory!
Thanks in Advance :)

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Fri Aug 07, 2015 6:49 am
horrendous says...



Name of Work: Arthur's Showdown
Genre: Realistic fiction
Link: Arthur's Showdown
Special requests: i intend to send this work to a literary magazine in hopes of it being published. i need complete, brutal honesty on every aspect. grammar, sentence structure, characters, word choices... everything.
Important information: the story revolved around Arthur and his decision to fight back after a loan shark decides to execute him.

i look forward to hearing from you
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synonyms: appalling, frightful, hideous

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Fri Aug 07, 2015 9:58 pm
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Hey @elwarren! Your review is finished :)

I'll try to get to yours tomorrow @horrendous (if not tomorrow, definitely Sunday!!)
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