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Fri Jul 13, 2012 8:27 pm
DudeMcGuy says...



I...have...returned!
Hello again Rubric,

Will you take a look at Ch. 3 (parts 1 + 2) for me?
work.php?id=95978
work.php?id=95979

This chapter (and possibly the next two) are more character/background focused than world-building. But it wouldn't be fair for me to ask you to review later parts of the story without any context. I'm still looking for help with world building if you would be so kind, but it's not really the focus of the chapter. Any help is greatly appreciated though.

Take how ever long you nee. I'll be patient and wait until you've finished those ahead of me. Thanks in advance!
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Mon Aug 06, 2012 10:40 pm
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Twit says...



Hey Abbot!

If you would be so kind: work.php?id=96771
"TV makes sense. It has logic, structure, rules, and likeable leading men. In life, we have this."


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Fri Aug 17, 2012 6:48 pm
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Twit says...



Back again. ^_^

work.php?id=96956
"TV makes sense. It has logic, structure, rules, and likeable leading men. In life, we have this."


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Sat Aug 18, 2012 6:34 pm
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DontStopBelieving says...



Could you review the beginning of my fantasy novel?
I would very much appreciate it, Thanks :D

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Sun Aug 19, 2012 7:52 pm
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Aurrora says...



Hi! I need a review for my fantasy short story. I'm submitting it for a contest at the end of the month and I need constructive feedback. It's in three parts, because I think its hard to read a lot of text online at one time, but altogether its only around 3,500 words. I would really appreciate it if you could read all three parts. The first one is here: work.php?id=96979 (for some reason this refuses to be an actual link. Sorry!) and there are links to the others at the beginning.

Thank you so much for your help!
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Mon Aug 27, 2012 4:31 am
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makennaC3 says...



If you have time, could you please review: work.php?id=97076
Thanks!!!!!!!!!
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Tue Nov 20, 2012 7:51 am
Rubric says...



*Cracks knuckles*

Alright, exams and assignments are over, and I think I'm up to date with everyone.

Bring it on.
So you're going to kill a god. Sure. But what happens next?

Diary of a Deicide, Part One.


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Tue Nov 20, 2012 2:33 pm
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Threnody says...



Hello! I was wondering if you could please review this~

work.php?id=97988

Thanks so much and I will certainly return the favor.
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Thu Apr 25, 2013 7:55 am
Rubric says...



Still open for business. Feel free to take a look at my reviews in the links posted thus far. They tend to be pretty detailed and comprehensive. If that's what you're after, post below!
So you're going to kill a god. Sure. But what happens next?

Diary of a Deicide, Part One.


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Thu Apr 25, 2013 12:46 pm
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emmylou1995 says...



Hi, Rubric! I would greatly appreciate if you would do an in depth review of my gothic/fantasy short story, Eventide. Here's the link.

work.php?id=101142
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