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Fri Apr 27, 2012 11:48 pm
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Once in a lifetime you might have the fortune of viewing a ShadowVyper sprung from its den; but, while viewing one isn't likely, you can often sense one's presence if you know where to look. You my friend have found the place a particular Vyper frequents (laying a pizza out would've drawn this one just as easily); it is opportunities like these are best utilized by having the Vyper peruse your scrolls containing precious gems that are words.

As with all ShadowVypers, the one you have come across has favorite things to review; and certain things that makes it curl its tongue in disgust. Luckily, this Vyper, while harsh in judgement, is kind with guidelines, and has provided these for you.

Favorite Things to Review

Serious Fantasy - this includes creatures such as dragons, Orcs, urgals, serpents, scorpions, wizards, and basically anything else that has more venom coursing through its veins than I do.

And

Essays- This ShadowVyper's allegiance lies with one true God, Jesus Christ; anything attacking said belief will result in a lethal dose of venom, that will make you cower before the wrath of the Vyper.

This Vyper is also very intune with nature, and enjoys essays which touch on the topic of science. Any sort of science pleases this Vyper; though this Vyper will tolerate nearly any essay (which is not a promise that it will be knowledgable on the topic, so much as it will be willing to tear it apart).

Moderate Topics

Poetry
This Vyper appreciates a good poem when it sees it; though, being a new poet itself, has a limited knowledge of what it truly means to be a poet. Therefore, this Vyper is willing to attempt its hand at poetry, under the understanding that it may come back bitten and inadequate.

Science Fiction
This Vyper tends to pass between Earth and some universe in which fantasy rules; and often finds itself bewildered when it accidentally slips into the world of science fiction. Therefore this Vyper often leaps across that fine line seperating fantasy and sci-fi, only to limp back bewildered and confused; but always leaves better grammar and punctuation where it has been.

Horror
The reason this Vyper regularly abandons the shadows is because it's squeamish. Gore and death are fine, but this Vyper isn't a big fan of supernatural beings.

Romance
While this Vyper isn't a fan horror, it's not a gushy Vyper-- and it's not a fan of romance. As long as there's an actual storyline, this Vyper has agreed to endure romance-- but, be warned, Vyper's intuition spots bad romance a mile away, and it will come crumbling to its knees.

Things Detested by this Vyper:

Bubbly Fantasy
On the other end of the spectrum, this Vyper despises that which dares to call itself 'fantasy'. That horror. That...type of piece...which involves unicorns, pixies, rainbows, butterflies, and generally every other thing that can easily be killed. The Vyper will review it, but don't expect a favorable outcome.

Fan fiction
Respect yourself. Just kill it now.

and

Pieces with descriptive bedroom scenes
This Vyper will not tolerate ANY descriptive intimate parts. If the scene fades out, then, fine-- but no sex scenes. The Vyper does not care if the scene is surrounded by battles and wizards and dragons; no fornicating on this Vyper's turf.

Bring on the requestssssss!

~Shady 8)
Last edited by Shady on Tue Aug 26, 2014 12:49 am, edited 7 times in total.

"u and rina are systematically watering down the grammar of yws" - Atticus
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"A fish stole my identity. I blame shady" - Omni
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Sat Apr 28, 2012 2:39 am
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Ikerot says...



So do you take scifi/fantasy?
I don't like pretty-sih fantasy with unicorns either xD

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Fri May 04, 2012 10:41 pm
Shady says...



Yep! Done!

"u and rina are systematically watering down the grammar of yws" - Atticus
"From the fish mother to the fish death god." - lehmanf
"A fish stole my identity. I blame shady" - Omni
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Sat May 05, 2012 12:07 am
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DudeMcGuy says...



Hey ShadowVyper!

If you still need more review material, would you mind taking a look at this?
(Ch.1 in two parts. It was too long on it's own)
work.php?id=95055
work.php?id=95059

This is the first chapter in the book I'm working on. I'm sorry to say it's not really a continuation of the story from my "prologue". (although they are related).

You said you enjoyed the first one so I figured I'd pass along the next part to you.
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Thu May 10, 2012 1:12 am
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Shady says...



Done!

"u and rina are systematically watering down the grammar of yws" - Atticus
"From the fish mother to the fish death god." - lehmanf
"A fish stole my identity. I blame shady" - Omni
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Mon May 14, 2012 4:24 pm
guineapiggirl says...



Hullo, could you review the first two chapters of my fantasy novel for me?
work.php?id=95000
Thank you very much!
  





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Mon May 28, 2012 3:19 am
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Shady says...



Done!

"u and rina are systematically watering down the grammar of yws" - Atticus
"From the fish mother to the fish death god." - lehmanf
"A fish stole my identity. I blame shady" - Omni
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Fri Jun 01, 2012 8:02 pm
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DudeMcGuy says...



Hi Shadow!

Got more material for ya: work.php?id=95667

This is chapter 2 of the "dragon story" I've been working on. You said you really enjoyed the last chapter, so here is the next part!
I didn't bother splitting it up this time, so sorry if it's a really long read.

Take your time with it, I'm a patient person.
And send your own requests my way too :)
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Sat Jun 02, 2012 1:22 am
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Shady says...



Done Dude! Great job!

"u and rina are systematically watering down the grammar of yws" - Atticus
"From the fish mother to the fish death god." - lehmanf
"A fish stole my identity. I blame shady" - Omni
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Sat Jun 02, 2012 1:44 am
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Teren says...



Hi, a review here would be greatly appreciated:
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Tue Jun 12, 2012 2:50 am
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Shady says...



Done! Your piece was great!

"u and rina are systematically watering down the grammar of yws" - Atticus
"From the fish mother to the fish death god." - lehmanf
"A fish stole my identity. I blame shady" - Omni
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Tue Jul 17, 2012 9:57 pm
DudeMcGuy says...



Hello Shadow,

I've completed Ch.4 If you would like to take a look at it. This one took a while to finish.

work.php?id=96478
work.php?id=96479

I hope you enjoy reading it. Let me know if there is anything I could improve on.
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Wed Jul 18, 2012 8:50 am
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Nerosns says...



Hey there : )
This prologue only has 1 review and as much as I appreciate it I'd like 1 or two more to get a few different opinions, I'd love it if you could review it for me ^^.

www.youngwriterssociety.com/work.php?id=96320

Thanks heaps if you read this!

( Link didn't work so I re-posted, if it doesn't work could you please copy and paste it :) )
  





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Sat Jul 21, 2012 9:30 pm
Shady says...



You both have reviews! And both works were great!

"u and rina are systematically watering down the grammar of yws" - Atticus
"From the fish mother to the fish death god." - lehmanf
"A fish stole my identity. I blame shady" - Omni
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Sun Jul 22, 2012 8:47 pm
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LemonyIce says...



Hey Shadow!

I posted this chapter quite a while back, and I never really got very... helpful reviews on it. What I would really like is some constructive criticism, so would you be able to review that for me, please? :D

If you're interested, this is the Prologue~

Thanks!
~Lemony
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If I were to pluck on your heart strings would you strum on mine?

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