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Mon Apr 15, 2013 6:26 pm
Auxiira says...



Hey Shady!
Can you do the first two chapters of this on hiatus sci-fi dystopia novel for me?

Chapter 1:
work.php?id=100743

Chapter 2:
work.php?id=100744
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Thu Jun 13, 2013 10:35 pm
Shady says...



Anyone else?

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"From the fish mother to the fish death god." - lehmanf
"A fish stole my identity. I blame shady" - Omni
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Mon Aug 19, 2013 8:50 pm
Shady says...



Come on guys. You're letting me get lazy. No one wants a review?

"u and rina are systematically watering down the grammar of yws" - Atticus
"From the fish mother to the fish death god." - lehmanf
"A fish stole my identity. I blame shady" - Omni
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Wed Oct 09, 2013 2:07 am
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RedMoon says...



Hey, I don't exactly need a review on my prologue (Fantastical: Book 1 The Mirror) but it wouldn't hurt to have more than two opinions on my story. I also recently posted the first chapter. Here are the links to both:

The Prologue:http://youngwriterssociety.com/work.php?id=104392
The First Chapter:http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/work.php?id=104394

If you don't have time or aren't interested, I understand. Thanks for taking the time to consider this anyway. :D
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Sun Nov 03, 2013 6:23 am
horrendous says...



The Pact - Prologue Rewrite

That's a lil summin summin i'm working on. It's fantasy/horror. The violence is graphic and explicit, just so you're warned.
hor·ren·dous
adjective: shockingly dreadful; horrible
synonyms: appalling, frightful, hideous

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Wed May 28, 2014 3:38 am
Shady says...



I'm back in business! Bring on the requests. 8)

"u and rina are systematically watering down the grammar of yws" - Atticus
"From the fish mother to the fish death god." - lehmanf
"A fish stole my identity. I blame shady" - Omni
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Thu Jul 10, 2014 10:02 pm
BellaRoma says...



I know you said that you enjoy fantasy but... any chance you would review the later chapters of my novel. It's a narrative, sort of to do with insanity.
Here's the link to the first part Imaginary Friends part 1: Mercy
Thanks
PS. There are a few *cough, cough* grammar issues on the first bits that I will be sorting out in the future. It does get better though, I assure you.
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Fri Jul 11, 2014 4:45 pm
Lefty says...



Hey, there! Would you mind reviewing the first chapter (or two) of my novel? I have five chapters up, but one or two is fine. It's fantasy, but mostly because there are sorcerers in it. Thanks!

The Fighter of Aldea - Chapters
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Mon Jul 14, 2014 9:31 pm
NerdBird says...



HAI! I would love it if you could give me your take/opinion on my revised chapter 1 of my novel(based on all currents reviews/suggestions)

There will be more to come as well, obviously :)

The Shifties Chapter 1 - Found - REVISED
  








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