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Fri Jun 03, 2016 2:39 pm
Vervain says...



One more try? I'll be open for about four weeks before moving-out season comes, so if you want a review, feel free to request!
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Fri Jun 03, 2016 3:47 pm
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Costa says...



I've got an ongoing novel that can always use some feedback to be spruced up. While it's not a finished piece, it is on chapter 15 - they're all quite lengthy, too. With that in mind, I fully understand that you'd be tackling this at your leisure.

If you're willing, here's the link to the prologue and first chapter (mistakenly uploaded together because I was a babby YWS user at the time!):

Do I need to provide a link to the following chapters, too?

Thank you for your time! :)
  





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Fri Jun 03, 2016 3:49 pm
Vervain says...



If you want me to follow the whole novel, just the link to the first installment is fine! I'll try to get through this in a timely manner, thanks so much!
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Fri Jun 03, 2016 3:56 pm
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Morrigan says...



Beep boop! Will you take a gander at this old thing? Collisions
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Fri Jun 03, 2016 7:23 pm
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soundofmind says...



Aah hey there. Would you like to take a look at Sick to My Stomach? ?? Maybe? :0
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Mon Jun 06, 2016 2:21 pm
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Lightsong says...



Hey, please review A Denial Not by One Own Self! Thanks! c:
"Writing, though, belongs first to the writer, and then to the reader, to the world.

The subject is a catalyst, a character, but our responsibility is, has to be, to the work."

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Mon Jun 06, 2016 2:24 pm
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Vervain says...



@Lightsong, I'll get right to it once I get a few novel reviews done! It shouldn't be more than a day or two ^^

And thank you @soundofmind @Morrigan so so much for your patience! I got really sick right after I re-opened this, so I wasn't able to get anything done until today. @Costa, I'll be getting to your novel next, probably get the first review done today and then maybe one a day after that until I'm all caught up!

Anyone else who wants to request: Go ahead! I don't have any cap this time!
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Tue Jun 07, 2016 3:49 am
yizhongt says...



Hey there, could you please review all the current chapters of my WIP? Here's the link to the prologue.

Starlight: Prologue

Could you please focus on characterisation, dialogue, plot and flow? Please dont be too harsh as well, but not too soft at the same time, if thats possible. Thanks in advance!
  





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Tue Aug 08, 2017 3:10 am
Vervain says...



BUMP! It's word-devourin' time!

{{0/3}}
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Tue Aug 08, 2017 4:36 am
inktopus says...



The Moon Needs Her Night Chapter 11 I'd love it if you woulf review this!
insert profound quote here

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Tue Aug 08, 2017 5:49 am
Lightsong says...



Please review God's Assassin ★ 5! It's the fifth part, so if you need a better understanding of the story, you can start reading it from the first part. Thank you! :D
"Writing, though, belongs first to the writer, and then to the reader, to the world.

The subject is a catalyst, a character, but our responsibility is, has to be, to the work."

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Tue Aug 08, 2017 5:55 pm
bluewaterlily says...



Hi, could you review this short story of mine?

Dangeous Creatures


It's a fairy tale retelling of Red Riding Hood that I wrote a couple years ago and I'm looking to revamp it and possibly turn it into a novel or novella.
"A poet is, before anything else, a person who is passionately in love with language." - W.H. Auden
  





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Tue Aug 08, 2017 7:38 pm
Vervain says...



Full up for now! I'll be getting to y'all in the next week or two. Thanks for your patience!

{{3/3}}
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Mon Nov 20, 2017 1:17 pm
ChocoDanish says...



i need help with my tenses n my pace. pick whichever u like

Beginning (part1)
Family and Friends (part2)
Fluffs (part3)
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Tue Jul 17, 2018 6:25 pm
Vervain says...



RULES UPDATED: I am only taking 1 request at a time.

All previous requests have been wiped as they're almost a year old.

I'll respond when the review has been completed! Please wait for me to respond to the last review before submitting your request.

Please do not request a review more than twice in a row, to give others a fair chance too.

I will not review works with more than 4 reviews already or which are older than 6 months. Exceptions may apply.

I will not follow novels or multi part short stories in my WRFF for the time being. I will review one chapter or part at a time. Thank you for your understanding.

I reserve the right to refuse to review a piece based on my personal beliefs. This will be rare and far between but I have to say it so no one is ever surprised.

I am still harsh. I can still be nice. Promise. Tell me which you'd prefer when requesting.

Link to your work.

//fixes "Open For Business" sign
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