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Tue Oct 11, 2011 12:23 am
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[[First post currrently under renovation]]

Let me start off by saying that I can be the gentlest reviewer in the world if you want me to be. It's just not my norm, so if you want a nice review as opposed to a harsh one, please specify.

I will ask that you please link me to whatever it is you want me to review. It makes my job easier, which means it's less time between you requesting and me reviewing.

What I will review: Anything. I don't care if it's your 12-year-old poetry or your avant-garde performance script, your prospective novel on its third draft or its twentieth, a first chapter or a last -- toss it at me.

If you're interested in editing your piece, I will award 50 points to anyone who can make me eat my words. Show me your improvements, show me the places where you've grown as a writer, not necessarily because of my critique but because of critique on the piece as a whole. It must be an edited work that I have reviewed in order to be eligible.

On novels: I will not read and review entire novels, only chapters.

I do tend to be fairly harsh. If you'd rather I not be, mention that in your request. If you want a review on some specific -- grammar, plot, characterization, punctuation, flow, dialogue -- mention that in your request. If you have a time-sensitive piece, such as a class assignment, that you need reviewed within 24 hours or so, mention that in your request. I'll do my best to accommodate you.

I will take only 1 request at a time. Please check my latest post in the thread to see if I've completed the last review!

//hangs up 'OPEN FOR BUSINESS' sign
Last edited by Vervain on Sun Jan 14, 2018 8:20 pm, edited 5 times in total.
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Tue Oct 11, 2011 11:17 am
ziggiefred says...



Hello, thought I'd make the first request.
WARNING: I will tear your piece to shreds.

Please, go ahead :)
Thank you :)
The best is what you make it!

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Wed Aug 07, 2013 7:47 pm
Vervain says...



Going to bump this up again. I have nothing to do until school starts, so feel free to request every review you can outta me. I'll do my best to hold my review up to standard.

I'll be on most of the time, most days, for the next week and a half.
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Tue Aug 27, 2013 6:23 pm
MysteryMe says...



You posted this a long time ago, so I'm not sure if your still reviewing, but if so I would really like it if you reviewed my story 'Mother' linked here...http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/work.php?id=103827

You just seem like the perfect person to do it, and I could really use your advice. Thank you!!!
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Fri Aug 01, 2014 6:10 am
Vervain says...



Whoops, well, it's been a while. Here I am again, though, ready and willing to review!
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Fri Aug 08, 2014 3:12 am
IdaPhillips says...



The Lizards

Hi, just wondering if you would mind reading this piece. It's comedic sci-fi, and it's nice and short. A review would be tremendously appreciated :)
  





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Fri Aug 08, 2014 12:29 pm
Vervain says...



Done! (There's my good deed for the year, hah.)

Any other takers?
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Fri Aug 08, 2014 3:38 pm
windrattlestheblinds says...



I'd love a review on Monachopsis if you've the time. :)
  





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Sat Aug 09, 2014 12:22 am
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Absolutely done! (Two good deeds already? At this rate, I'll have a head start on the 2020's by Monday!)
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Wed Aug 20, 2014 9:25 am
beans says...



Hey, ancient! read my story! you won't regret it.

Ok, maybe you will. But do it anyway. Builds character.
  





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Wed Aug 20, 2014 6:58 pm
Vervain says...



Is there a specific part you'd like reviewed?
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Mon Aug 25, 2014 2:06 pm
TakeThatYouFiend says...



Hats!
*waves* Hello over there! This wouldn't take too long to read (this may or my not be due to the fact I am to lazy to write anything particularly long) and it is throughly silly.
You know that studded leather armour in films? Nobody wore that. I mean, how would metal studs improve leather armour?
  





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Fri Aug 29, 2014 11:01 pm
JumpyDot says...



despair
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Tue Sep 02, 2014 1:33 am
Vervain says...



@TakeThatYouFiend - done!

@Jumpyspot - I'm sorry it's taking me so long to get around to it; I promise I'll get to it sometime in the next year :P
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Sat Sep 06, 2014 1:05 pm
deleted5 says...



The Cold Within: Chapter 1: Journal
Hey! This one is quite a biggy (6000 words) so I'm not getting much reviews. Want to check it out? :P
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