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Sun Nov 07, 2010 6:29 pm
silented1 says...



Like a review.
Poetry only please.
Post a link as well, along with any comments you feel you should add, like any special information that I'll need to know to understand it, or anything you want me to focus on, like flow, or imagery or whatever.

I'll probably be harsh / oboxious / pointless( at times within the review).

Preferances:
Length(at most):40 lines in total. Not counting the breaks inbetween stanzas
Length(at least):10 lines.
I would like for the poem to have a message, not just describing how great a rainbow is. This is a flexable rule, it will vary depending on the poem.

But I will PM you the reason(s) as to why I am not reviewing your poem. And I will owe you a review on your next poem, no matter what.

Lastly, I reserve the right to decline you of the review. Like what is said above, if I decline you a review, I will PM you why and I will review your next poem no matter what.

Even more lastly than what is above: Please feel free to PM me if I haven't given you a review without PMing you first, or leaving something here, by the way.

Old topic name(just because I am lazy): Give me something to do.(if you like harsh reviews) Reopened
Last edited by silented1 on Mon Feb 25, 2019 5:00 am, edited 12 times in total.
[quote]If it's arguable, then it probably is." - Xeriana X

Link to my will review for food thread: topic71713.html
  





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Sun Nov 07, 2010 7:42 pm
PaperCrane says...



Any of mine please, need lots of feedback on them :)
I wasn't born to mourn, but I mourn the day
I stand here alone:
Fighting my heart for dreams, my mind for hope
  





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Sun Nov 07, 2010 8:52 pm
AquaMarine says...



In that case, Ed, I present to you a poem that would seriously benefit from help: post783007.html#p783007

:D thanks!
"It is curious how often you humans manage to obtain that which you do not want."

-Spock.


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Sun Nov 07, 2010 11:56 pm
Shearwater says...



It's about time! =D
May you rip it to shreds, oh great one.
topic71714.html
By the way, I am aware that the moon cannot be bigger than the sun, it was based off a sketch I did...

Thanks in advance! (if you do it)

-Shear
There are three rules for writing a novel. Unfortunately, no one knows what they are.
-W. Somerset Maugham
  





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Mon Nov 08, 2010 12:13 am
silented1 says...



PaperCrane wrote:Any of mine please, need lots of feedback on them :)

Alright, but please in the future, leave me a link.

Amy, your review is done, I'll start working on your poem, pink. And I'll get to paper's when I have the time to go searching for one.

Paper, your review is also done. As well as pink's.
[quote]If it's arguable, then it probably is." - Xeriana X

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Sat Nov 20, 2010 2:02 am
silented1 says...



I'm back open.
[quote]If it's arguable, then it probably is." - Xeriana X

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Mon Nov 22, 2010 9:13 pm
Button says...



If you have the time, could you please take a look at this? :)

topic72242.html


Thanks!

-Coral-
  





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Tue Nov 23, 2010 1:34 am
SilentRain says...



Hello agian!
Me agian!
topic72172.html
Another poem.

Thanks,

~Rain~
topic68479.html <---- Click here to have your poems reviewed!

Theres always a rainbow after the Rain!!!!!!!
  





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Tue Nov 23, 2010 1:48 am
Flower~Child says...



Hey Eddie, could you review this for me please? topic72330.html
My reality comes to a close as I once again realize that you don't love me, and even if I love you with my everything you will never care.

  





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Tue Nov 23, 2010 2:00 am
silented1 says...



Okay, three poems are in cue. I do not want to be overloaded, so until I've finished atleast 2 / 3, please do not ask for a review. Sorry.
[quote]If it's arguable, then it probably is." - Xeriana X

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Tue Nov 23, 2010 5:44 am
silented1 says...



Silent, your poem is done. I'll have to get to the others tomorrow since it's almost 1am. Sorry.

Flower, your poem is done, and Perse, your poem is done as well.
[quote]If it's arguable, then it probably is." - Xeriana X

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Wed Nov 24, 2010 1:17 am
Vampyre says...



post788803.html#p788803

I'd really appreciate it if you could review this. Thanks :)
Vampyre
That night she drew her swan breath in a bed
Made soft with all her razor blades,
That kissed her wrists with the romance you lacked.
As the hands that you’d kissed now dealt the trades


  





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Fri Nov 26, 2010 9:10 am
Vampyre says...



Thanks heaps for the review, I really appreciate it. Will edit later when I have time.
Thanks again :)
Vampyre
That night she drew her swan breath in a bed
Made soft with all her razor blades,
That kissed her wrists with the romance you lacked.
As the hands that you’d kissed now dealt the trades


  





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Mon Dec 06, 2010 10:43 pm
silented1 says...



I'm still open, lol.
[quote]If it's arguable, then it probably is." - Xeriana X

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Tue Dec 07, 2010 2:57 am
Nightshade says...



I would love a harsh review on one of my poems. Here's the link:
topic72616.html
Thanks!
  








People say I love you all the time - when they say, ‘take an umbrella, it’s raining,’ or ‘hurry back,’ or even ‘watch out, you’ll break your neck.’ There are hundreds of ways of wording it - you just have to listen for it, my dear.
— John Patrick, The Curious Savage