z

Young Writers Society


Red Hot Fiery Reviews!



User avatar
245 Reviews



Gender: Female
Points: 1836
Reviews: 245
Fri Oct 22, 2010 8:10 pm
View Likes
Firearris says...



Come and get 'em!

What I'm willing to review:
Absolutely anything. Scripts, Stories, Art, Poetry, Annnnythiiiing you want.

Rules:
Please, don't ask for more than two or three things at a time. I want to be able to get to everyone's reviews. :) After I complete the items you ask for reviews on, you are free to ask for more.

Price:
There isn't one, really! My reviews are free. I like reviewing, so I'm not really losing anything, and I'm going for a Reviewer II badge anyways, so in the end I have a benefit. :)

Examples:
post776396.html#p776396
post776382.html#p776382

List:
None yet, hurry up and drop links!
[Griffinkeeper] 10:45 pm: The guard appears "We have weasels now!"
[Firearris] 10:45 pm: askes the guard for the weasel!
[Griffinkeeper] 10:45 pm: The guard gives Firearris the Weasel.
[Firearris] 10:46 pm: aquires the weasel and renames it "Cat"

Take that, Lumi.
  





User avatar
106 Reviews



Gender: Female
Points: 3649
Reviews: 106
Fri Oct 22, 2010 10:33 pm
IgnisandGlacialis says...



Hiya Fire! We met in the chat room *shakes hand*.
So, I was just wondering if you could review this for me ... It's the first part of a fantasy novel I'm writing. Okay, it's a little long, but please don't be put off!
viewtopic.php?t=69991
If you could review this, it'd be very much appreciated! Of course, I know that everyone's time is limited, so please don't feel pressured.
Thank you so much!!!
- Ignis :pirate3:
The POTATO of DOOM

A thousand times it calls your name
A thousand times you hear it
And fools are those who heed its call
But fools are those who fear it.


The Interesting Thoughts of Edward Monkton
  





User avatar
19 Reviews



Gender: Female
Points: 3689
Reviews: 19
Mon Oct 25, 2010 8:12 pm
View Likes
emmily says...



I'd appreciate any advice/feedback that you are able to give. I particulary need help with verb tenses, more complex grammar, realism of dialogue and how readable the story is (does the reader have enough information to be able to follow what's going on and does the text read smoothly?)
I've posted the first two sections of my general fiction novel in preparation for posting the full novel over the weekend. You can find the chapters at topic71017 and topic71023. My story focusses on a group of youth with emotional/behavioural issues who are attending a wilderness high school. When you've got the time I would really appreciate it if you could look over the first section. I'd love any feedback that you are able to give. If you do Advanced Critiques and are interested in the plot/style of my writing, I'd really like to have a few people who are willing to loosely commit to reading the whole thing for plausibility, continuity and character development issues. I don't have any deadlines for this novel (since I'm currently working on the sequel) so take as long as you need to. Just a warning though, if you're interested in the full novel, it's roughly 100,000 words/35 chapters of at least 4 pages each.
  





User avatar
321 Reviews



Gender: Female
Points: 12611
Reviews: 321
Wed Oct 27, 2010 1:41 am
Flower~Child says...



topic71190.html
My reality comes to a close as I once again realize that you don't love me, and even if I love you with my everything you will never care.

  





User avatar
23 Reviews



Gender: Male
Points: 1072
Reviews: 23
Mon Sep 19, 2011 9:50 am
UrbanNomad says...



Hey I need some feedback on my poem "Clouds"
topic87751.html
If you could have a look soon that would be great
Thanks, Oliver
  





User avatar
202 Reviews



Gender: Male
Points: 10840
Reviews: 202
Mon Sep 19, 2011 10:52 am
View Likes
Blues says...



Hi, Firearris,
Could you please review this? topic87766.html
It's called 'A Hand to Hold - a 7/7 Memorial' and it's a short story about the London Bombings (where I live, I'm not really in North Korea like my location says XD) 6 years ago. I have 2 reviews but I'd like another viewpoint on this.
Thank you very much! I hope this helps you earn your badge. It's not got any blood in case you're worried by the way :)
Mac
  








Talent is something that comes from within; it has nothing to do with age.
— AURORA