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Sun Oct 10, 2010 11:00 pm
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carbonCore says...



About
I like to dig deep into your story, twist its perspective and view it from different angles, and offer my opinion on its meaning. My reviews tend to be long and focused, and they will likely show you a side of your piece that you have not seen yourself. They should be written within a few hours of your post here; a day at most, unless otherwise specified.

If you would like a grammar and spelling check of your work, please specify that in your post. I used to do them, but now they take too much time - time I'd rather spend thinking what your story is about.

What I review
I review works of any rating.
    - Fantasy short stories
    - General Fiction short stories
    - Science Fiction short stories
    - Action / Adventure short stories
    - Advanced Critiques of novels of any genres above

What I do not review
    - Poetry
    - Romance
    - Any unfinished story. If you want me to review, your story had better have a beginning, a middle, and an end.

I will review fan fiction if I am familiar with the parent work. Post the link here, and I'll check it out.

Disclaimer
I can be harsh. If there is anything I like in your story, I will point it out, but I will also point out the things I do not like. As with all reviews, the things I write are my opinions - if you consider them then you'll make me a happy carbonCore, but if you don't, then that's up to you.

Your reviewer,
cC
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Mon Oct 11, 2010 7:26 am
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cannoncomplex says...



Hi, I'm Cannon Complex and I have posted my first story in YWS

http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic70549.html

Sumamry: The story is set in New Zealand specifically Wellington and it tells of a story of two people sent off to a mission. This post is just the first part since the whole story is long and may take time to read.

I'm alright with hasrh critics...I had experienced that before so give it all and thank you
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Fri Oct 15, 2010 9:20 am
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cannoncomplex says...



can you review this piece: its a continuation of part 1
http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic70731.html
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Fri Oct 15, 2010 7:59 pm
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SilentRain says...



Hi, I'm Rain! This is a poem, do a good review and I will post here all the time!

topic70684.html

~Rain~
topic68479.html <---- Click here to have your poems reviewed!

Theres always a rainbow after the Rain!!!!!!!
  





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Sun Oct 17, 2010 8:49 pm
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blackbird12 says...



Hey there! Would you please review this poem for me? Thanks a lot in advance!

topic70757.html
If I had wings, I would have opened them.
I would have risen from the ground.

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Wed Oct 20, 2010 12:36 am
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Hey, I'm Jessica... jDawn. Anyway, would you mind reviewing this first chapter for me, thanks in advance!

topic70899.html
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Wed Oct 20, 2010 6:01 pm
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Bickazer says...



I would greatly appreciate it if you took a look at the first chapter and prologue of my latest novel:

topic70759.html

Thanks in advance. ^^
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Mon May 02, 2011 1:11 pm
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carbonCore says...



*commences thread necromancy* Arise, foul thing, from the dark places of the earth forums!

Now accepting review requests. Post those links!
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Tue May 10, 2011 7:12 pm
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xDudettex says...



Hey cC!

So, I have a question for you...

I had to write a piece in the genre of magical realist for Azila's writers roulette contest and to be honest, I suck at anything other than romance or general teenage fiction. And I admit, I did cheat a little by adding some romance to the plot to get the piece written, but I wanted to ask you if you'd do one of your super awesome in-depth reviews on it for me?

I know you dislike reviewing romance, and if this really puts you off reviewing, then I want to ask if you'd mind just reviewing the fantasy aspects of the piece. If you don't want to review at all then it's fine.

If you are interested though, then here's the link.

topic80683.html

It's called 'Burning up' and it's posted in general short stories as I was stuck as to where to post it.

Thanks for taking the time to read this!

xDudettex
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Tue May 17, 2011 11:06 pm
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Azila says...



Greetings.

After a long and gruesome battle with writer's block, and over 20 hours straight of (somewhat futile) research, I've written a historical fiction, and (I hope) I'd like to hear what you think. I'm so sorry that it's not fantasy, by the way.
  





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Thu May 19, 2011 9:36 pm
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cannoncomplex says...



Carboncore, how have you been?

Can i ask you again to review another story. Its not the same as the one as before but this one is based off an italian legend. I am experiemnting with a distinct voice in this one as well as the structure.

Instead of going a straight plot, i decided to make it to seperate blocks interwoven with each other.

http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/post863193.html#p863193


THANKS
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Sat May 21, 2011 3:04 am
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Camulaeus says...



Can you review this please? topic81137.html

It would really help me a lot :)
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carbonCore says...



Gack, stupid notifications. -_- Cannon & Cam: Done!
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Hecate says...



Can you please review my short story?

It's general fiction.

post869910.html#p869910

Thanks :)
  








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