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A Paladin's Acts of Kindness - My Review Thread (Open)



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Sat Oct 09, 2010 3:20 pm
LastPaladin says...



Hello, this is my Will Review For Food Thread, I shall warn you now I'm quite harsh so if you can't take criticism, please go elsewhere, because I don't hold back, if what you desire to be reviewed is awful I will say, but if it's good it will get glowing praise.

Now I only review poetry, and don't expect me to do them immediately, but I promise you the wait will be worth it. I'm very analytical with my reviews not going for grammar but more the nuances of said poem. If I feel it's cliché you can guarantee I will say.

I hope this is clear :).

So come one come all !
Last edited by LastPaladin on Wed Nov 24, 2010 4:36 pm, edited 1 time in total.
You poor take courage
You rich take care
This earth was made a common treasury
For everyone to share
All things in common
All people one
We come in peace
The orders came to cut them down

Billy Bragg - The World Turned Upside Down





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Sat Oct 09, 2010 6:19 pm
blackbird12 says...



Hey there! Would you please review this poem for me? Thanks in advance!

topic70448.html
If I had wings, I would have opened them.
I would have risen from the ground.

-Mary Oliver





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Mon Oct 11, 2010 12:16 am
SilentRain says...



Hello, please review this for me, topic70455.html
If theres spelling mistakes its because I still can't find my spell cheak button...
topic68479.html <---- Click here to have your poems reviewed!

Theres always a rainbow after the Rain!!!!!!!





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Sat Oct 16, 2010 11:31 pm
LastPaladin says...



Done and done!

Now send me more, remember only poems!
You poor take courage
You rich take care
This earth was made a common treasury
For everyone to share
All things in common
All people one
We come in peace
The orders came to cut them down

Billy Bragg - The World Turned Upside Down





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Tue Nov 23, 2010 2:57 am
Flower~Child says...



Will you review this? topic72330.html
My reality comes to a close as I once again realize that you don't love me, and even if I love you with my everything you will never care.






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Wed Nov 24, 2010 4:37 pm
LastPaladin says...



Flower~Child wrote:Will you review this? topic72330.html


Done!

Anymore reviews people want me to do? Remember I'll only do poems and will give you a good thorough review :).
You poor take courage
You rich take care
This earth was made a common treasury
For everyone to share
All things in common
All people one
We come in peace
The orders came to cut them down

Billy Bragg - The World Turned Upside Down





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Thu Nov 25, 2010 2:33 am
Flower~Child says...



Here's another one if you don't mind.

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My reality comes to a close as I once again realize that you don't love me, and even if I love you with my everything you will never care.






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Fri Nov 26, 2010 6:50 am
spike71294 says...



Please review my poem- The Battle For Happiness
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Sat Nov 27, 2010 6:14 pm
LadySpark says...



would you please review my poem Mask? viewtopic.php?t=70962
thanks
Pointe

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Sun Nov 28, 2010 10:05 pm
LastPaladin says...



Finally done every single one :D. Give me more!

Hope they helped.
You poor take courage
You rich take care
This earth was made a common treasury
For everyone to share
All things in common
All people one
We come in peace
The orders came to cut them down

Billy Bragg - The World Turned Upside Down





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Thu Dec 02, 2010 6:09 pm
Tigersprite says...



I heard you're a really good reviewer, and though this work of mine is pretty old I would appreciate a harsh review on it. I hope you don't mind that it already has a few reviews; it's just that I want to start writing poems again and I've found a harsh review motivates me most. This is it, The Wisdom of Mr Fox. Thanks in advance.

Tiger
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Wed Dec 08, 2010 3:33 am
Jashael says...



is lyrics okay? Ummm... topic72931.html it's kind of poetry anyway? O_o light poetry hahaha
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