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Lumi here, bringing you reviews and poem polish since well before this thread was posted!

Just simply leave a link below and in no time, your poem or short story could be shiny and leaving your friends and family gasping for air in awe!

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Lumi wrote:...but we sell no shoes.

Lumi here, bringing you reviews and poem polish since well before this thread was posted!

Just simply leave a link below and in no time, your poem or short story could be shiny and leaving your friends and family gasping for air in awe!

That's right, folks! Lumi's reviews induce asthma in all of your loved ones!

No special prices requested!

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You are soo funny...hahaha...anyway, ok. I'm the first one.. need to improve in my poetry PRONTO...you see, I write prose, but lately, I've created a character who writes poetry (plus, my English assignments right now are mostly poetry *sigh*) and I just don't wanna let him go even if I --well, stink in poetry. So help me, please! Thank you soooo much.

Here's the link:
topic70228.html

Hey, Lumi! Would you mind reviewing this poem for me? Thanks in advance!

topic70448.html

Lumi wrote:...but we sell no shoes.

Lumi here, bringing you reviews and poem polish since well before this thread was posted!

Just simply leave a link below and in no time, your poem or short story could be shiny and leaving your friends and family gasping for air in awe!

That's right, folks! Lumi's reviews induce asthma in all of your loved ones!

No special prices requested!

Herp Derp Review and Shoe Emporium and affiliated
business associates are not held legally responsible for any
crying, sneezing, itching, watery eyes, labored breathing,
drop in self confidence, thoughts of a business degree,
or otherwise irrational behavior. Consult your doctor if
you experience any of the above symptoms. Please allow
up to a week for response time unless otherwise stated.
All rights reserved.

Lumi! beautiful idea, this way we can expose our work. And besides, I trust your opinion no matter how harsh it gets. I need a review on this one :

Topic ID: 70454

Thank you again

Hey there, Lumi! Can you help me review this?

It's the first part to a retelling of the Snow Queen; and I hope it doesn't bore you too much!

post772026.html#p772026

Here Lumi, be as harsh as ya wish or whatever, just want one good review please .

Hello here Lumi! Got a poem here for you to review, topic70455.html

Have at it!!

~Rain~

Please? topic70588.html

Mr. Lumi, I need some polishing again. Thanks!
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Look up Hunted by thestorygirl. I dont care if you call me dumb and say it was badly excecuted just give me some CC please!!!!!!!!

Hey lumi!
I am pretty new, and wondering if you will help me out and review my new poem.
I don't know how to do links, but it's called The Rain's Dance and is by me, obviously!
Thankyou very much!

Hi Lumi,
I was hoping you could check out the first chapter of a general fiction novel I'm putting together.
It's kind of lengthly, but I hope you tear it to pieces. I want all the help I can get with this one.
Thanks in advance,
Alex

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