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Sat Jan 15, 2011 3:54 pm
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Sat Jan 15, 2011 5:15 pm
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AngerManagement says...



Rach could you please review My Monstrocity I think there's a couple of problems with it. And the ending is a bit iffy...

Thanks in advance. :D
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Mon Jan 17, 2011 7:10 am
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And done!

Oh, and there are new rules and regulations! Please read 'em!
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Mon Jan 17, 2011 2:44 pm
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MiaParamore says...



Hey Rachael. COuld you review Turning the Tables(1.1)
I am not happy with it, but your wonderful review could help me. ^_^

Thanks, and you ARE awesome.
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Mon Jan 17, 2011 6:15 pm
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Aw, thanks, Shrubs :)

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Mon Jan 17, 2011 8:58 pm
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Tigersprite says...



Hey, Rach! Can you please review this romance short story (well, I think it's partially romance, though I might change it to general fic.)? Here's a thousand cookies! It's for Skins' contest, and I've got some great feedback already but alas, I've yet to be graced by your review. Thanks in advance! :D

Tiger

P.S. Ribbit. Is. Completely. AWESOME. ;)
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Mon Jan 17, 2011 9:52 pm
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Skins says...



No one's liked this thread yet...? :O DEMONS. *likes*

Okay, you're gonna hate me times 1000 for this because I know you loathe reviewing things after loads of reviews before, but I shall ask anyway... Would you mind reviewing the fourth part of Stop and Stare for me...? I love you... :smt003

topic74309.html

You see, although I have many reviews already, the post feels so lost and empty without your sexy frog/Ribbit. With even a tint of green froginess in it, the post's dreams will be fulfilled. Yes, posts have feelings too. (Plus, I've given it quite a big edit since my latest review on it)

Please and thank you, m'dear!

Oh, and Ribbit is awesome. Like my FACE.
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Tue Jan 18, 2011 3:21 am
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Evi says...



Hello Rachael dearest! I know I've already sent you a PM with the link to part two of my short story, so I hope I'm not being a bother. I just thought I'd drop the request here as well, although by no means do you need to rush.

The Waking Hours (2/3)

Thank you so much whenever you could grace it with your presence! ;) Oh, and I'm sorry I couldn't get to your novel chapter today-- I'll read it tomorrow or Wednesday, and if I don't, send me an angry PM.
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Tue Jan 18, 2011 4:15 pm
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LadySpark says...



Hi Rach! I would love a review from you!

This is my new novel called: Pens and Knives. It is an action/adventure novel with a touch (and I mean touch) of romance. I need a REALLY harsh review (or as harsh as ya' get) because I want to enter this in a contest. Ramble away!

novel.php?id=1026


bribe:
I shall beat everyone!!!!!!!


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Wed Jan 19, 2011 2:11 am
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All requests accepted! Anyone who posts before I say I'm ready to accept more requests shall be summarily leapfrogged.
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Wed May 04, 2011 2:16 am
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Well, this thread's a little dusty, but I'm once again ready to review.
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Wed May 04, 2011 2:17 am
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Jas says...



topic80222.html

Bada-bing! Could I please get a review on the above? Thanks!
I am nothing
but a mouthful of 'sorry's, half-hearted
apologies that roll of my tongue, smoothquick, like 'r's
or maybe like pocket candy
that's just a bit too sweet.

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*Gives 10 thousand cookies*
I am nothing
but a mouthful of 'sorry's, half-hearted
apologies that roll of my tongue, smoothquick, like 'r's
or maybe like pocket candy
that's just a bit too sweet.

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Wed May 04, 2011 3:28 am
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*steals cookies and eats*

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Thu May 05, 2011 4:23 am
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silentpages says...



I personally, would love to be your 100th review, because Ribbit is awesome. :)

I have one of my newest fantasy short stories here: topic80454.html
And I was hoping to get a review on it. It's temporarily(?) called Wyvern, and it's essentially a story about what happens to a village when a wyvern relocates there after a forest fire, told from the perspective of a character (I don't specify the gender, but I believe that it's a girl) who has severely bad vision in a world where they don't have glasses or contacts or anything. :)

It's actually an edited version... And it's really long now because I added a scene. T-T In the first version, I was told that the wyvern wasn't evil-monster enough, basically, so what I'm wondering is if I succeeded in making it a little more fearsome this time around. Does it come across to the reader that the wyvern is the bad guy here?

Aside from that... *shrug* I'm not really sure about some of the changes I made, so any feedback is welcome. I'm hoping to find a happy medium sometime in the future, after I get a few more opinions. And, of course, I'd love some feedback on what you think of my writing style in general, how I can improve, etc. etc. One of my biggest problems is that I use lots of ellipses and fragments and stuff, so... Does it work, or is there something I can fix?

Thanks in advance! :)
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