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Tue Jul 20, 2010 8:57 pm
VivielTwixt says...



Bring me those worn out first drafts and I'll help you shape them up. At Story Boot Camp, I help stories develop their plot muscles for endurance that will last a novel (or short story). Characterization will be made stronger. Works will shed cliches and become lean on creativity. I'll try not to be too harsh :x , but I will be honest. Your stories will complete camp more coherent and confident. No payment necessary, but guestbook posts would be appreciated :D .


I'm willing to enroll:

Action/Adventure
Science Fiction
Fantasy
Realistic Fiction
Romance

If your work doesn't fall under any of those categories, I'll still review it provided that it is NOT:

Fan-fiction
Poetry/Songs
Historical Fiction
Vampire/Ghost Related
Nonfiction


PM me if you have any questions.
Last edited by VivielTwixt on Sun Aug 15, 2010 7:18 pm, edited 2 times in total.
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Sat Jul 24, 2010 4:42 pm
VivielTwixt says...



Come on people :( . I'm open.
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Tue Jul 27, 2010 11:07 am
iceprincess says...



Can you please help me review my novel --- Empyrosis? I'm still writing the second chapter, and I'll probably post a new chapter every week. :D Please?

I promise I'll spam your guestbook every now and then if you promise to review the whole thing! :wink: (Just kidding.)
you'll never find another sweet little girl with sequined sea foam eyes
ocean lapping voice, smile coy as the brightest quiet span of sky
and you're all alone again tonight; not again, not again, not again.
and don't it feel alright, and don't it feel so nice? lovely.







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Tue Jul 27, 2010 10:25 pm
VivielTwixt says...



Of course, I'll help you. I'm on it right now.


Finished. Iceprincess, Empyrosis has just graduated. It was in pretty good shape already, so I didn''t have much work to do.
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Fri Jul 30, 2010 3:32 pm
blackbird12 says...



Hey there! Would you mind reviewing this short story for me? Thanks!

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I would have risen from the ground.

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Fri Jul 30, 2010 10:01 pm
Lena.Wooldridge says...



topic67676.html

Sorry, its kind of historical fiction.
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Sat Jul 31, 2010 1:43 pm
VivielTwixt says...



Blackbird, it's done. 11:58 has graduated and it didn't really need lessons. It just took the test and passed. Smart story. ;)
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Sat Jul 31, 2010 2:05 pm
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I'm not really good with historical fiction, but I'll see what I can do, Lena.

*Edited*
Swimming Against the Kolyma River has graduated. There were some character muscles to shape up, but now I think your story is in an overall good shape.
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Sun Aug 01, 2010 8:13 pm
Sins says...



Hey Viviel 8)

Would you mind reviewing a chapter from my story? It's the fourth chapter, is that okay? I have written a short summary of what has already happened in the story in the post, so that will help you understand what's going on.

post746933.html#p746933

Thank youss!
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Mon Aug 02, 2010 3:48 pm
VivielTwixt says...



No worries, Skins. It's already done. I read the other chapters, too, since they weren't too long. There's only one review though.

A Shot of Arrogance has graduated and is well on its way to a successful story life.
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Thu Aug 05, 2010 2:46 pm
Sins says...



Hyea Viviel!

Don't worry, I'm not stalking you. ;) Would you mind reviewing the next chapter of my story for me? topic67921.html It's kind of long but I hope you don't mind.

Thanks a lot!
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Thu Aug 05, 2010 9:45 pm
VivielTwixt says...



Sure, Skins.


Don't worry, I'm not stalking you.

Interesting, because I am stalking you. :shock:
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Thu Aug 12, 2010 11:20 pm
VivielTwixt says...



I'm open people.
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Fri Aug 13, 2010 1:48 pm
Hecate says...



Hey there! Will you please review this for me? It's not actually my first draft, but a thorough review will be appreciated:

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Sun Aug 15, 2010 8:02 pm
VivielTwixt says...



It's done, Stelagineva. I'm closing, but if you have any questions about my review or need help, don't be afraid to PM me. I'll be happy to help.
If you want to view paradise
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Want to change the world, there's nothing to it
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