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Sat Jun 12, 2010 8:05 am
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MiaParamore says...



Hey, everyone.

I'm back after a long, stressful break from YWS. So naturally my fingers are itching to review you guys. About what I review is simple. I'll review pretty much anything, except for poetry since I really suck at it.

So, it's simple. Just copy the link of your piece, post it here and let me review it.

Looking forward to review you. :smt001
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Sat Jun 12, 2010 8:20 pm
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zankoku_na_tenshi says...



*suddenly shy* H-hi there! ^_^ I was wondering if maybe you could take a look at my novel, The Trouble with Titanium? It's looking a little lonely, review-wise, especially the second chapter.

If it's too long (because those chapters are long XD) or not your thing, then you obviously don't have to bother, but it would be great if you would stop by. ^_^

Okay, so basically, Titanium is sort of an affectionate parody/deconstruction of superhero stories, with lots of sarcasm, genre-savviness, and general silliness alongside a lot of random character introspection. XD The first half of it was my (uncompleted) JulNoWriMo project last year, and the second half is mine for this year. It was a lot of fun for me to write, but all alone I never know if I'm being funny, so I really need reviews; otherwise, I have no idea. XDD

Anyhow, synopsis... well, here's the one on the novel page. XD: "Beleaguered secretary Phoebe Yu is left with no choice but to take up the cape of her vanished employer-- the beloved superheroine, Titanium Maiden. A comedy of self-discovery, human fallibility, and answering the telephone."

In return, I'd gladly read your story! I love reading novels, I feel like I can be a better reviewer once I really get into the meat of a story and can talk about characters and content. ^_^
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Fri Jun 18, 2010 5:56 am
MiaParamore says...



Zan: I am working on it. Since it's very lengthy, it might take me some time.

Guys, throw your request at me. I'll catch all.
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Sat Jun 19, 2010 1:31 pm
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MiaParamore says...



All reviews are done.
Anyone willing to get their novel reviewed?

Hey guy I thoiught you would be very excited to get reviews done, but turns out I was wrong.
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Sun Jun 20, 2010 6:01 pm
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LastPaladin says...



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It's only chapter 1 do ya want me to post Chapter 2 and please be indepth this is 22 chapters I've done and need to edit badly!
You poor take courage
You rich take care
This earth was made a common treasury
For everyone to share
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We come in peace
The orders came to cut them down

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lil-mizzkitty1 says...



Hey shubhiloves2write ,

I looked at your other review and I like the way you review. So I’m asking you if you would review chapter 1.1 of my novel ‘una sola rosa, mi jardin...un solo amigo, mi mundo’ for me. It is in general fiction because I put a little bit of everything in it. Action, romance and so on... :) I hope you’ll take a look if you’re not too busy. Because if you are no problem. It is topic65566.html .

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Wed Jun 23, 2010 6:12 pm
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Thanks in advance!

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Sat Jun 26, 2010 2:16 am
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MiaParamore says...



Well I am glad I got so many request and I will be sure to help each of you out.

~Shubhi
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Sat Jun 26, 2010 6:25 am
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MiaParamore says...



Lil yours and Day yours is done. Working on LastPaladin. Hopes to finish it soon. 8)
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topic65975.html hi i wouldnt mind a review It is still in early stages and sort of an experiment for me and yeah chapter 1 is very normal but it is sorta meant to be.... but itd be good to see how my writing is viewed, by everyone, these days.thanks
Oh and its called "why not" and it is fantasy... though you cant tell from the first chapter... sorta the point
  





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Mon Jun 28, 2010 12:54 pm
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MiaParamore says...



Hey all! LastPaldain finally yours is complete and Tigs I would look at your probably tomorrow! Hope that is not a problem! :)
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Hey Tigs, your complete too. Glad I completed all the request. Feel a bit lighter.

But guys overburden me quickly.
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Tue Jun 29, 2010 8:50 am
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*coco says...



Hiya, shubhi :D

I'd really appreciate a review of my novel, it's a romantic and although I put it up a while ago and had people review it, I've made some major changes with the help of some of the feedback I got so I'd really appreciate a review from someone who hasn't read it yet. So far there are ten chapters, it's a lot, I know but I'd be super dooper grateful if you could check it out when you can and give me your honest opinion on the story and whether I should carry on. Take as long as you need though, no rush :)

Of Loss and Love: chapter 1 http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic53716.html

Thanks a bunch!

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Thu Jul 01, 2010 3:49 pm
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ASAP. Thanks for the request sweet *coco. :)

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Fri Jul 02, 2010 5:31 pm
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(Working) Title: Wolfsbane, Mustard-seed and Silver
Synopsis: Uh, a story featuring classical music, Kramer vs Kramer, a unicorn who reads the clouds and two humans trying to have a kid that's not a werewolf. And, uh, vampires. Although it is rated 16+, there's nothing hugely explicit in it -- it's only high so I don't get told off if something does turn up.
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