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Mon Apr 26, 2010 9:59 pm
Areida says...



I said I wouldn't, but I changed my mind (o, the fickle ways of the female mind!). I am now taking requests!

BLUF (Bottom Line Up Front):

- I like fiction, especially historical fiction, realistic fiction, and tales of luuurve. (I will review horror, sci-fi, fantasy and action-adventure pieces as well, but know in advance that I'm a bit biased against all of those genres, because I think they're really difficult to do well. I'm picky.)

- My poetry critiques are not critiques; they are the opinion of one reader, because I don't really know much about poetry. I only know what I do/don't like.

- Any rating is fine. I watched the entire first season of Spartacus: Blood and Sand, and thus feel that I have been desensitized to blood, guts, swearing and sex.

- I write great dialogue. My descriptive prose is lacking.


ROE (Rules of Engagement):

- If it's really really long, it will take me longer to leave a comment.

- No more than three requests at a time, please!

- I go to a military academy, so when push comes to shove, food, sleep, working out, and homework have to come first. But even if it takes a bajillion years, I eventually get to your request.

That's about it. So chop chop, kiddos! I'm ready to read yo stawries. :D

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Pieces Critiqued

1. Chapter Two, by Attolia [05/24/10]
2. A Shot of Arrogance (Chapter One), by Skins [05/24/10]
3. Her Last Drink Is Coffee; one, by Hannah [07/07/10]
4. Her Last Drink Is Coffee; two, by Hannah [07/07/10]
5. Bridges, by Kylan [07/07/10]
6. What I've Always Known, by xangeleighfshox [07/14/10]
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Fri Apr 30, 2010 6:17 pm
Sins says...



Heya! :)
Looks like I'm your first request!

If possible, could you review this for me please? It's the second chapter of a romance novel. Also, if it's not too much hassle, could you also review the first chapter? The link to it's in the second one!

Thanks in advance,

Skins xoxo
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Sun May 02, 2010 4:23 am
Hannah says...



Hi, Areida! I would love it if you could pick apart Her Last Drink Is Coffee for me. It's two parts, so follow the link under 'possible related topics' for the second part, okay? Thank you so much! I look forward to your review! :3
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Sun May 09, 2010 3:16 pm
Kylan says...



post701073.html?hilit=Bridges#p701073

it'd be great if you could give this a look.

Thanks!

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Tue May 11, 2010 12:58 am
Jas says...



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Could you review this please?
I am nothing
but a mouthful of 'sorry's, half-hearted
apologies that roll of my tongue, smoothquick, like 'r's
or maybe like pocket candy
that's just a bit too sweet.

~*~





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Wed May 12, 2010 8:37 am
Jiggity says...



I'm going to mark this space, in case you've done some of these already or for when you're ready...or something. *marks*
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Wed May 12, 2010 10:49 pm
Attolia says...



Hey Areida. I already PMed you about this, but I just saw that you have a thread on here so I thought I'd make it official. And to say I see you already have three, well actually five, requests, so I'm just gonna follow suit by Jiggity and save a place in line :).

So, whenever you can get to it:
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Thu Jul 08, 2010 7:00 pm
Areida says...



Updated! I've finally knocked out a couple of reviews.
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Thu Jul 08, 2010 7:11 pm
screamandshout says...



Would you mind having a look at this short story for me?
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Thu Jun 22, 2023 9:04 am
DreamyAlice says...



Hello, I am one of the res crew mods here on YWS. This is a message just to inform you that I will lock and archive this thread as it is not active anymore. We have to archive and lock the inactive threads to keep the forum organized so no worries if you'd like to reopen it at any point in the future please contact a current resources moderator, we would be happy to reopen it for you ^-^

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