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Mon Sep 12, 2011 12:57 pm
Twit says...



Hello!

If you have the time, I'd love some harsh shredding on this. ^_^
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Thu Sep 15, 2011 7:31 pm
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Shearwater says...



Twit-done!

Happy to take another request. ^^
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Sun Oct 23, 2011 9:40 am
manisha says...



hi
i would love it if you would review my latest poem
[url]Boulevard of life[/url]
thank you! :)
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Fri Feb 17, 2012 9:51 pm
Shearwater says...



Manisha- Finished.

Giving this thread a little push since I'm now available and active.
Send me your requests! :)
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Fri Feb 17, 2012 9:57 pm
TheClosetKidnapper says...



Can you please review this?
http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/work.php?id=93449
Thank you!
I'm never what I like
I'm double sided
And I just can't hide
I kind of like it
When I make you cry
'Cause I'm twisted up, twisted up
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Fri Feb 17, 2012 10:39 pm
Shearwater says...



UpAndOut15-Done!

Thank you for the request. :)
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Sat Feb 18, 2012 12:44 am
Jas says...



work.php?id=93230
short story, general fiction. Thanks!
I am nothing
but a mouthful of 'sorry's, half-hearted
apologies that roll of my tongue, smoothquick, like 'r's
or maybe like pocket candy
that's just a bit too sweet.

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Sat Feb 18, 2012 3:43 am
Shearwater says...



Jas-Done!

Thanks for the request!
Hope the review helped.
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Mon Feb 20, 2012 5:54 am
Wolferion says...



Then I'll take the advantage of your done status and request as well =)

It's a first chapter from the Action/Adventure genre, but be warned, it doesn't start all light.
Link : http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/work.php?id=93534

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Mon Feb 20, 2012 11:46 pm
~Volant~ says...



Thank you so much for posting here, Shear!! It's really awesome of you to do all these reviews!! <3

Could you look at work.php?id=93532 please? It's for an Original Character Tournament on another site. An OCT is like competitive Storybooking, but for comic artists, as well....

unfortunately, because I've been drawing comics so much, my writing has really taken a downturn. :/ I need all the help I can get, haha!!

Thanks! <3
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Thu Feb 23, 2012 6:13 pm
Shearwater says...



Shinda-Done!
Volant- Done!

Thanks guys, for the requests. :3
Hope I helped. ^^
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Thu Feb 23, 2012 8:40 pm
Natural Militia says...



I wrote a first chapter to a novel recently titled Redemption - Chapter 1. If you could review it, that would be most appreciated. The chapter is intended to be incredibly short, I debated on whether to call it a prologue or chapter 1, but I hate prologues, so I just called it chapter 1.

The two genres are Romance (which you said you do), and mystery / suspense.

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Mon Mar 05, 2012 9:06 pm
Shearwater says...



Natural Militia - Done!

Sorry for being late. Hopefully my review helps. ^^
Keep throwing me those reviews, people!
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Fri Mar 30, 2012 5:28 am
MiaParamore says...



Daddy dear! <3

Although I've asked for a review, but I thought let's feed the elephant. xD!

Here, please review. work.php?id=94313
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Fri Apr 06, 2012 11:44 pm
Threnody says...



Hello! I really love the reviews you write and I was wondering if you wouldn't mind reading over my short fiction story Motion in a Minute? Thanks so much and I will return the favor!

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