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Fri Oct 23, 2009 4:34 pm
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*coco says...



Wow look at how generous you are! Please can I get reviews for my story. It's a romantic fiction called Of Loss and Love, there are currently 4 parts to it.

http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic53716.html (chapter 1)
http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic53746.html (chapter 2)
http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic53800.html (chapter 3)
http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic53888.html (chapter 4)

Thank you so so much. I really appreciate it!
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Sat Oct 24, 2009 9:32 am
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AquaMarine says...



Nitpick me, bud!

:D Thanks

~Amy
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Sat Oct 24, 2009 12:43 pm
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Jetpack says...



Whoa. I'll get to it when I can, but I've just got new glasses and staring at the computer is making me dizzy.

Of Loss and Love, I
Of Loss and Love, II
Of Loss and Love, III
Of Loss and Love, IV

It's a spoon's life, really.

Done and dusted. Sorry it took a little longer than anticipated! Keep the requests coming. :)
  





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Sun Oct 25, 2009 7:11 pm
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AudreyAlice says...



Okay. So I have this personal narrative posted in Non-Fiction. I know you said that you don't review non-fiction, but I thought I would ask anyway. I have seen some of your reviews, and I believe you do a great job, especially, with sentence run-ons and such, which, admittedly, is one of my weak points. So, that is why I am asking.

Of course, if you do not want to review it, I totally understand. :D Here is the link: http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic53879.html
  





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Sat Jul 10, 2010 8:19 am
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Jetpack says...



*recovers very old thread*

I figured there was no point starting a new one, so this is open again. All the guidelines on the front page still apply. If you haven't seen me around, I tend to do quite long reviews with a lot of nitpicks. I do not review any form of poetry. For Fanfiction, PM me and I'll consider it if it's based on a story I know.

Any requests? :D
  





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Sat Jul 10, 2010 10:45 pm
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PhoenixBishop says...



I would very much like to request a review. This is the first chapter of my book. Thanks in advanced.


topic66771.html
This is one little planet in one tiny solar system in a galaxy that’s barely out of its diapers. I’m old, Dean. Very old. So I invite you to contemplate how insignificant I find you.

Death~
  





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Sun Jul 11, 2010 8:27 am
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Jetpack says...



Done, Phoenix! Thanks for the request.

Anyone else?
  





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Tue Jul 13, 2010 8:54 pm
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Lord Anzius says...



I'm not sure but do you take multiple requests? these are all quite short since I always cut my stories into parts:

Scifi
Lightning platoon 106
prologue and chapter 1 part 1 and 2

http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic60898.html
http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic61630.html
http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic66800.html
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Tue Jul 13, 2010 9:06 pm
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Jetpack says...



Yes, I do. I shouldn't, but I do. Especially if it's sci-fi. :D
A checklist, then.

Lightning Platoon 106 Prologue
Lightning Platoon 106 Chapter 1 Part 1
Lightning Platoon 106 Chapter 1 Part 2

EDIT: All done, Anzius. It starts brilliantly and then fades away a bit, which is unfortunate because I love your ideas. Hope you can act on some of the reviews. :)
Last edited by Jetpack on Wed Jul 14, 2010 6:59 pm, edited 1 time in total.
  





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Wed Jul 14, 2010 6:51 pm
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Leilani says...



http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/viewtopic.php?t=66775 please and thank you ^-^ i appreciate your kindness ^-^
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Wed Jul 14, 2010 7:27 pm
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Jetpack says...



All done, Leilani. Any more requests?
  





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Fri Jul 16, 2010 3:47 pm
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Rosendorn says...



Would you be so kind as to review this short story? ^^ It's for a contest, so a review before the 19th would be very much appreciated! (Title- One of the guys (1). Genre- Romantic short stories)
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Fri Jul 16, 2010 4:12 pm
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Leilani says...



thanks jetpack :D i really appreciate it ^-^
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Sat Jul 17, 2010 12:29 pm
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Jetpack says...



No problem Leilani. And Rosey, yours is done, but rather unhelpfully because there wasn't much to criticise!

More requests, pretty please?
  





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Thu Aug 05, 2010 12:06 pm
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Jetpack says...



I'm back! The Review Shack is open for requests. Anyone?
  








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