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Fri Apr 24, 2009 1:51 pm
Lord Anzius says...



Could you please review this work oh almighty Evi.

http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic46616.html

mansion ch 8 part 2
To copy reality is good... But to create reality is much, much better.
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Fri Apr 24, 2009 3:48 pm
WhiteTiger93 says...



Hey Evi, I've seen some of your reveiws and they're fantastic. Would mind reveiwing my revised version of Saved under romantic? It would make me extra happy (:

Saved http://www.techzapp.com/browse.php?u=Oi ... 3D%3D&b=61


~Tiger
Hermione, shut your ungodly, lopsided mouth and quit interrupting! 20 points from Gryffindor. You know, for the brightest witch of your age you can sure be a dumba** sometimes. *smiles* 10 points to Dumbledore!

~A Very Potter Musical - Dumbledore
  





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Sat Apr 25, 2009 10:52 am
Meep(: says...



Hey Evi!
Meep here :D
I was wondering *nervous* if you'll help me out with a short story.
Pretty please with chocolate chip cookies?
Thanks (:
[The link is in my signature. Its called "Seven Letters"]
~Liverpool F.C Supporter~
"You'll never walk alone"
  





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Sat Apr 25, 2009 8:54 pm
Lord Anzius says...



http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic47202.html
sorry to bother you again this soon, but I want you to read this story.

And there was drum roll
chapter 1 part 1.


Please review it oh awesome one.
To copy reality is good... But to create reality is much, much better.
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Wed May 06, 2009 8:31 pm
Evi says...



...in which I bump my thread. ^^

Despite the war, my deep loathing of playing Greeter has motivated me to continue critiquing throughout the week. Which means I need requests.

It's a win-win situation, m'dears.
"Let's eat, Grandma!" as opposed to "Let's eat Grandma!": punctuation saves lives.
  





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Wed May 13, 2009 10:29 pm
Evi says...



*nom*

May I have another?
"Let's eat, Grandma!" as opposed to "Let's eat Grandma!": punctuation saves lives.
  





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Mon May 18, 2009 1:49 am
Antigone Cadmus says...



Would you please critique my first YWS piece?

Reflections on Pasiphae

post557940.html#557940

Other Fiction

Thanks in advance,
Tigger
Odi et amo. quare id faciam, fortasse requiris?
nescio, sed fieri sentio et excrucior.
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Sat May 23, 2009 9:08 pm
Rosendorn says...



topic48428.html

Title: A Dark Elf's Tale
Genre: Fantasy

Do what you do best. ;) (Ie- shred it!)
A writer is a world trapped in a person— Victor Hugo

Ink is blood. Paper is bandages. The wounded press books to their heart to know they're not alone.
  





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Tue May 26, 2009 6:59 pm
Lord Anzius says...



http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic47319.html

you read the first part... here is the second. (And there was drum roll.)
To copy reality is good... But to create reality is much, much better.
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Wed May 27, 2009 12:01 am
Winter's Twelfth Night says...



Hey Evi! I'm back for more of your wonderful reviews!
Here is the link:
topic48548.html

Please rip it up. Tear it to pieces. Do whatever you like with it! But please just let me know if it is even remotely interesting to read or if you struggled to get through it. I have a major problem with telling instead of showing. :D
Thanks so much!!
-Winter
Mamillius: Merry or sad shall’t be?
Hermione: As merry as you will.
Mamillius: A sad tale’s best for winter. I have one
Of sprites and goblins.

The Winter's Tale
  





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Tue Jun 02, 2009 2:48 pm
Evi says...



Finished, Anzius and Winter. ^^ Any other takers?
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Tue Jun 09, 2009 2:06 pm
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Lord Anzius says...



You have been without requests for too long! Here:
http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic47544.html
To copy reality is good... But to create reality is much, much better.
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Thu Jun 11, 2009 10:16 pm
82manycookies says...



http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic49268.html

The link above should take you too the story i want you too review.
Thanks for this!
~Cookies (Livi J.)
"My Mama used to tell me, 'lifes like a box of chocolates... you never know what your gonna get.'" -Forrest Gump
  





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Sat Jun 13, 2009 2:21 am
Crouching Tuna says...



Hello

Can you review this prologue, which is also my first piece here?


Here you go

It's pretty long, but the problem that I noticed myself has something to do with just the beginning. Please help me with that, or if you want to shred all of them, that's even greater!

cheers
Tuna
Picture is worth a thousand words, but it uses up 3000 times the memory.
  





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Sat Jun 13, 2009 3:16 am
Bickazer says...



If you don't mind really long stories...could you take a look at "The End of Time"? I'm not really looking for anything too in depth in chapter one, because I've already gotten quite a few in depth reviews on it, but chapter two is looking incredibly lonely at the moment, so yeah. >_> I would definitely appreciate an in-depth review for that one.

Chapter one: topic48651.html

Chapter two (part A): topic49181.html

I know it's long, so I will return reviews if you finish it. :)
Ah, it is an empty movement. That is an empty movement. It is.
  








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