I really appreciate it if you reviewed the first and second chapter of my novel, Empyrosis. It's about teenagers, though, but I can assure you they're not angsty and hormonal. It's actually a fantasy novel about a pair of twins --- one is an eudaemon (guardian angel) while the one has special powers of her own. Thank you so much!
you'll never find another sweet little girl with sequined sea foam eyes ocean lapping voice, smile coy as the brightest quiet span of sky and you're all alone again tonight; not again, not again, not again. and don't it feel alright, and don't it feel so nice? lovely.
So basically it's about these teenagers (sorry, I know you don't like stories with them) who get these powers, and all this other stuff. Sorry, it's really hard to explain, but I assure you it's not as cliche as it sounds. Well, thank you!
"You either die a hero, or live long enough to see yourself become a villain- TDK"
Could you please review my short story 'Play.Pause.Rewind.' topic67782.html
Its for a Contest about friendships and it's generally about what happens when some friendships spiral out of control. It IS about teenagers >.> but I tried to make it as un clichéd as I could.
Dont tell me the moon is shining, show me the glint of light on broken glass.
Could I please get a review of the above? It's for a class, due Thursday and needs tons of help. Thanks in advance!
I am nothing but a mouthful of 'sorry's, half-hearted apologies that roll of my tongue, smoothquick, like 'r's or maybe like pocket candy that's just a bit too sweet.
Twenty years from now you will be more disappointed by the things you didn't do than by the ones you did. So throw off the bowlines, sail away from the safe harbor. Catch the trade winds in your sails. Explore. Dream. — Mark Twain
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