Young Writers Society

The summer has officially started, and school no longer has an iron grip on my life. I am re-entering the YWS life, so please bombard me with needed critiques so I can get working! I know I haven't been around for a while, but I used to be known as a pretty good critiquer, so try me!

So, interested?

What Will You Critique?

- Any short stories
- Poetry, though not as well as prose
- Chapter one of a novel

What Don’t You Critique?

- No graphic sex scenes
- Pick something - no 'anything at all!'
- Chapter 10 of a novel. You can come back later and ask for 2 after 1, but don't make me just say the same thing over again.

What Are You Good At Finding?

- Grammar/spelling
- Emotions
- Flow
- Realism (needed for all types of writing, including fantasy.)
- Character development
- Description
- Dialogue.
- General atmosphere.
- Character History (with each other, themselves, etc.)
- Atmosphere (the basic things you notice when you first enter a room, like lighting and occupants.)

Eh… maybe more, but that’s off the top of my head. Ask for something, and I’ll keep an eye out for it.

Got Any Examples?

-Wrong or Right<-- Winner of Suzanne’s Best Critique contest!
-Gage
-I Love My Dirt; My Dirt Loves Me
-~Michelangelo's Night and Day~ Chapter One
-Burnt Memories

Have Any Spots Open?

No.

What Critiques Do You Owe?

Jasminebells
Waiting for: 5

Elinor Brynn
Of Lumas
Galazy
The Land of the Faeries
The Last Days of Summer
Waiting for: 1

Bolt
Waiting for: 5

Durriedog
Waiting for: 5

Sunstarfrozenlife
Waiting for: 5

HorseradishCares
Waiting for: 5

peanut19
And The Light Fades
Waiting for: 0

Evi (3)
Waiting for: 3

Lilymoore
The Siring Part 1
The Siring Part 2
Hemlock
Kitties and Coloring Books
I Could Really Use a Wish Right Now Part 1
Waiting for: 0

Esther Sylvester
Waiting for: 5

fiction903
Waiting for: 5

Day
Waiting for: 5

SeleneForeverDream
Waiting for: 5

emoticon220
Waiting for: 5

RazHuni
Song I Heard In A Dream
Waiting for: 4

Vanadis
Waiting for: 5

Forestqueen808
Waiting for: 5

Ninjacookiemonster
The Dreamkeepers Chapter One
The Dreamkeepers Chapter Two
The Dreamkeepers Chapter Three
The Dreamkeepers Chapter Four
Gabriel
Waiting for: 0

Alwaysawriter
Waiting for: 5

Ultraviolet
To Be A Kid Again
Waiting for: 4

Adnamarine (4)
Waiting for: 4

Beckiw
Waiting for: 5

Jon
Waiting for: 5

Calligraphy
Waiting for: 5

Tatra
Waiting for: 5

pinkangel54123
Luna 1.0
Luna 2.1
Luna 2.2
Luna 3.1
Luna 3.2
Waiting for: 0

JustisMarez
Waiting for: 5

AngerManagement
Waiting for: 5

Who Owes You Things?

These are all extremely old, but maybe the people will be nice and allow me to claim them this summer! =]

- Caligula's Launderette - One critique and one fanmix for Third Place in Cal's Something Old contest (Requested: What do you want your fanmix of? Do you want it to focus on certain characters or relationships or plot? Do you have any preferences on color, font, or song choice or song genre? Please send a link or short summary or even just some info on characters, so I am not totally clueless.)
- Clo - One sketch for Honorable Mention in Lost in the Atmosphere contest (Requested: Subject matter - Character? Setting? Basically tell me EXACTLY what the subject/image is; Pen/Pencil; Colored or not; Give me lots of detail)
- KailaMarie - One critique for First Place and Most Creative POV

~JFW1415

Yess, I'm first!

I'd really appreciate it if you could take a look at this --- > topic39467.html. It's actually so ... terrible, and I'd really appreciate some help. =)
I know it's the first part of something, but I'm not gonna ask you to follow the story. Unless you want to

Thanks!
- Camille <3

Yes please! (you're amazing and I love you!)
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Thanks! It's kind of short, but there's plenty of things for me to fix, I just don't know them yet.

You're both done.

Anymore?

~JFW1415

Harold's Home.

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Yay! I'm really glad you posted something current, Jiggster! I owe you a critique from way back when but didn't want to do that old stuff.

Anyways, I'm in a writing mood (for once!) and it's a little too late for me to take on a story that long, so I'll tackle it tomorrow.

Remember guys - if I get two more requests it is closed, even if I don't get the chance to close it myself! Three max!

~JFW1415

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Heart of a Leopard Chapter 1, part 1 in Fantasy Fiction. (I have part 2 up, by the way.) It has been edited since Demeter's comments. If you notice anymore aloud/allowed mix ups.... *sigh* mark them.

Please focus on realism, description and atmosphere. Yes, I know I have grammar issues, but I have enough people doing that already! If you notice something really glaring grammatically say something, but don't focus on it. If you can make a quick comment about everything that would be amazing.

Thank ye!

http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/post459513.html#459513

Creep Chapter 2, for your viewing pleasure.

Hey, popping by to say thanks! I wish I'd gotten that review beforehand though, as it is, I've already handed it in. Ah, well, cheers anyway.

If you're up to it, I have another little something that could do with your amazing powers of critiquing doom!

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If'n you please, missus. Quite different from the last piece, I promise.

Could I claim the third place and ask you to review this: post460742.html#460742
Thankyou so much.
Sarah
x

But but.... PM me when you're open again darling?

I miss your reviews.

Haha, will do, OE.

Sorry about the wait guys! I've been busy with school, but I should be relatively free tomorrow night, so expect them done by then.

~JFW1415

Dibs on first crit? lol <3

Gah do you mind if I post a few things? I have just started a story and the Prologue and chapter 1 don't really need reviews, but Chapter two could use a good one. I just figured you probably wanted to read the first two parts before going to the third ^.^

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topic39694.html

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Thanks a bunch. If you want to review the first two parts be my guest, but they are pretty well picked over grammar wise. I just need to edit them still lol

OE! You broke the rules!

One request a time, missy.

~JFW1415