Young Writers Society

The grand opening of Alice's critique shop!

I'm good for every kind writing except poetry. You don't want me wasting your space with poetry I'm no good at it. I'm not even that fond of poetry. But I will read and critique to the best of my abilities, and if I like it particularly I will pester you to write more of it if it's a part/chapter thing.

Here you go, because you asked. :p

Prokaryote

Could you critique my short story Grace Under Pressure for me? post407855.html#407855

I've come to a toal dead end with the editing of it. Basically I just need someone to either say "give up now, delete it and pretend it never happened" or " it could be good, just fix..."

Thank you!

The Fragrance of the Perfect Lie

It's a Twilight *Post-Eclipse* fanfic (I'd love to know what I need to improve on with this story)

Alice dear, since I know how it feels to not get any participants in a Will Review For Food topic... ahem... I shall help you out!

I'd very much love you if you'd crit this. You can read the parts in any particular order, though there is only three at the moment. It's for Cal's Some Kind of Character Contest.

Holly

Hi, Alice!

Could you (maybe, possibly) write a review for the third chapter of my novel? I'd love any and all opinions on it.

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It's listed in action/adventure, though the adventure's only beginning. Thank you!

xxfourthelement

Hey I was wondering if you could critique my short story My Missing Half?

Thanks!

p.s. I love you signature!!

Review maii Action-Packed Adventure?

I need all the help I can get.
I wanna make it supahh.

ok, please review my two storys, one may be a short story and one is a work in progress and much longer. . .here are the links both a romantic vampire fiction and I am trying to break free fromt he twilight mold with both of them:
A Bloodied Rose:
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My Take On Phantom Of The Opera:

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Hello, I am one of the res crew mods here on YWS. This is a message just to inform you that I will lock and archive this thread as it is not active anymore. We have to archive and lock the inactive threads to keep the forum organized so no worries, if you'd like to reopen it at any point in the future please contact a current resources moderator, we would be happy to reopen it for you ^-^

-Alice