Young Writers Society

I will do my best to crit anything given to me!

Can do list:
Grammar
Plots
Dialogue
General flow of the piece
Atmosphere
Brutal honesty

In return, can I *pretty* please have reviews/crits on these two things [mainly the second]:

http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic30694.html
http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic31199.html

Thanks, muchily.

I got a three-part story called Tangled Up In Blue.

1: post382487.html
2: topic31268.html
3: topic31373.html

I will gladly review both of your pieces. Thank you!

Tangled Up In Blue, done!

Who's next?

MEMEME!

it's HSM\AATC FF so be aware.

here is chapter 1: topic31592.html

now 2: topic31611.html

thanks,
MATT

^ That one done

new chapter: post383145.html#383145
it may be a bit strong at the end.
thanks!
MATT

^Done

Critique this? It's my contest entry for JFW's contest. Don't mind the cliche ending with vampires - I was too uncreative to think of anything else. And, you know, if you do a line by line, I have cookies and some points waiting for you.

Here's the link!

topic31662.html

Thanks so much!

and here is chapter 4 (a wee bit better then the last: READ IT) topic31692.html
MATT

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