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Hi, 3B! I finally posted Part 7! Would you like to take a peek? ^^

12 Shocks of Xmas (Pt. 7)

I'll look at Fat Boy in return.

~ Jabber ~

?help?


Meeting Future Girl or Mission 'Past'
(Science fiction)

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Now I feel bad for asking a lot.

You've seen it, of course. [You mentioned you have.] I'd like a comment, though. ^^

The Dragon, the Dog, and the Dove

~ Jabber ~

Jared! I'd love some help on Suicide Kills Us All. Mind taking a look?

Thanks!

~JFW1415

Okay, everyone, I'm gonna need all of YWS to help me. I wanna be the next Featured Member. Not this next time, because Demeter is surely going to win, but the time after that. I want to have as many points as I possibly can. That means I need your help. I really don't like going around, searching through forums to find stuff to critique. So, if you have anything (Even the stuff that I said I really don't like) I'll still critique it. I haven't been Featured Member for a loooong time.

Oh yeah. There are still a few in this thread that I haven't gotten to yet. As soon as the points go to 300, I'll get to those. I want to be the next featured member, so PLEASE!!!! post anything here. Post as many links as you can get. Please. I beg you.

-Jared

Puh-lease! I need your guys' help! Seriously! Post your links here and I'll get to them as soon as the points go down to 300.

It's free critiques on basically anything you could possibly imagine. Just help me. Please?

-Jared

Will you critique something for your fiance?

Out of Focus

You know you love me, darlin'.

~JFW1415

Whenever it suits you, please take a look at:

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I'm afraid others are a bit wary to critique due to length and complexity, so be warned .

Look for things that don't seem realistic to you; grammar and usage are fine, too, but it's really the plausibility level that I'm a bit worried about. Do descriptions seem unbelievable? Are timings off? Are there events that just scream "Hold it!"? For an example of what I'm talking about, my review here (topic31974.html) should give you an idea as to what I'm talking about.

Cheers, and thanks in advance.

You begged me, so here you go:

Smiling's a Good Start

~JFW1415

If you could take a look at my story...its for a contest...Dawn with Fox? It's on my Featured Works...Thanks!

--Medusa.

i will absolutly put you out of your misery
chapters one through five in fantasy fiction

just go to Chapter five: Future meeting, A Power Switch, and A Cold Cave then go to the related topics and start with Chapter one, i think you'll like it!

Fantastic! I'm so excited to get these critiqued! I'm actually going to print these out and critique them, but they won't get posted until the points go down to 300.

To Do:

[s]JFW1415's Out of Focus[/s]
[s]and Smiling's A Good Start
[/s] (Done, but not posted)

[s]MidnightGladius's Triple Point - Segment 1[/s]
[s]and Triple Point - Segment 2[/s]
(Done, but not posted)

[s]Medusa's Dawn with Fox[/s]
(Done, but not posted)

Sam's A Lively Conversation Between Two Corpses (1)
and ALCBTC (2)
and ALCBTC (3)
and ALCBTC (3.1-4)
and D for Dareallylongwordican'tpronounce

Keep 'em coming!

Never mind.

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Hey Bear, above are links to a story I am working on, it is the first draft and has been edited a bit since then but I would still appreciate any input you could give me to make it better..*smiles*

The first one is chapter and and the second one is chapter two..go figure!

Thanks dude.

-Rory

Guys, I know it's taking me a long time to get all of these critiques up, but hang in there. They'll come soon enough. Don't worry. I have a lot posted now.

-Jared