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Wed Dec 03, 2008 8:13 pm
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CastlesInTheSky says...



Hi there Penguin.
I'd be delighted if you could review this: post460742.html#460742
Thankyou very much.
Sarah
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Had I the heavens embroider'd cloths,
I would spread the cloths under your feet.
But I being poor, have only my dreams,
So tread softly, for you tread on my life.
  





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Mon Dec 08, 2008 5:52 pm
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Adnamarine says...



I closed my eyes and pointed, and here's what I got:

topic39886.html

Pretty please and thank you. Sorry it took me so long.
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Wed Dec 24, 2008 12:26 am
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Twit says...



topic40698.html

Scavenger 1.5. Please? Like, pretty please?
"TV makes sense. It has logic, structure, rules, and likeable leading men. In life, we have this."


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Tue Mar 10, 2009 12:08 am
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Sare Agama says...



I have a couple; I won't give you my fan-fics, unless you have read Warriors or Redwall.

The Test A True story/event

Vashoa's Life My first story-ever.

Fake, or Real? For the February CIA contest

Whatever you feel like doing, or think needs doing. :)
Your monthly Bible quote: "Faithful are the wounds of a friend; but the kisses of an enemy are decietful." Proverbs 27:6
  





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Fri Aug 05, 2011 5:02 am
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PenguinAttack says...



This space now open for Reviews!
I like you as an enemy, but I love you as a friend.
  





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Fri Aug 05, 2011 5:32 am
Jas says...



Hi Pengu,

Could I please have a review on that?

viewtopic.php?t=85346

Thanks! I'd really appreciate if you worked on the characters, plot, imagery and stuff rather than nitpicky grammar stuff. Thanks again!

~jas
I am nothing
but a mouthful of 'sorry's, half-hearted
apologies that roll of my tongue, smoothquick, like 'r's
or maybe like pocket candy
that's just a bit too sweet.

~*~
  





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Thu Aug 25, 2011 6:17 am
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joshuapaul says...



Hola,

topic86584.html

Please read my story and tell me if you like it or not.
Thank you,
JP
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Fri Aug 26, 2011 1:59 am
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Courtlyn says...



post903973.html#p903973
I don't need any comments on punctuation/grammatical inconsistencies; I really just need it based on style, content, readability, etc. Thank you! :)
Idea? Drop me a line!
I love to research things.I do mostly nonfiction pieces such as current events, political/ethical/religious topics,and historical/scientific research.If you've a question you'd like answered or a topic about which you'd like to know more,I'll gladly write you a piece on it!
  





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Sat Aug 27, 2011 6:50 am
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Sassafras says...



If you're not too busy, I need you to read over this. topic86694.html

I've seen you give really good reviews and I'm in need of a really good review right now. Like I say, I personally don't like the beginning, the diary entry, and I'm thinking of replacing it with a short glimpse into my main character's future - as that is more exciting.

Anyway, I really want you to give this a thorough review.
A pale imitator of a girl in the sky.
  





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Sun Sep 11, 2011 4:32 pm
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joshuapaul says...



topic87441.html

Another one for you. Take your time it's in ten parts and rather long :)
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Wed Jan 25, 2012 12:53 am
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thetraveler says...



Do you mind reviewing for me?
Thanks :D
I just want to know if you like it, what you like if anything, if you don't like it, what I could do better :)
Thanks!
Cheers,
thetraveler
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SPOILED!!!
  





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Thu Jan 26, 2012 2:35 pm
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GoldenQuill says...



Buttercup!

Anyway, here's my most recent poem. Thanks in advance!
formerly ZlyWilk

Finally achieving my dreams. Dive into a unique horror story.
  








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