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Wed Dec 03, 2008 8:13 pm
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CastlesInTheSky says...



Hi there Penguin.
I'd be delighted if you could review this: post460742.html#460742
Thankyou very much.
Sarah
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Had I the heavens embroider'd cloths,
I would spread the cloths under your feet.
But I being poor, have only my dreams,
So tread softly, for you tread on my life.
  





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Mon Dec 08, 2008 5:52 pm
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Adnamarine says...



I closed my eyes and pointed, and here's what I got:

topic39886.html

Pretty please and thank you. Sorry it took me so long.
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Wed Dec 24, 2008 12:26 am
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Twit says...



topic40698.html

Scavenger 1.5. Please? Like, pretty please?
"TV makes sense. It has logic, structure, rules, and likeable leading men. In life, we have this."


#TNT
  





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Tue Mar 10, 2009 12:08 am
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Sare Agama says...



I have a couple; I won't give you my fan-fics, unless you have read Warriors or Redwall.

The Test A True story/event

Vashoa's Life My first story-ever.

Fake, or Real? For the February CIA contest

Whatever you feel like doing, or think needs doing. :)
Your monthly Bible quote: "Faithful are the wounds of a friend; but the kisses of an enemy are decietful." Proverbs 27:6
  





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Fri Aug 05, 2011 5:02 am
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PenguinAttack says...



This space now open for Reviews!
I like you as an enemy, but I love you as a friend.
  





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Fri Aug 05, 2011 5:32 am
Jas says...



Hi Pengu,

Could I please have a review on that?

viewtopic.php?t=85346

Thanks! I'd really appreciate if you worked on the characters, plot, imagery and stuff rather than nitpicky grammar stuff. Thanks again!

~jas
I am nothing
but a mouthful of 'sorry's, half-hearted
apologies that roll of my tongue, smoothquick, like 'r's
or maybe like pocket candy
that's just a bit too sweet.

~*~
  





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Thu Aug 25, 2011 6:17 am
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joshuapaul says...



Hola,

topic86584.html

Please read my story and tell me if you like it or not.
Thank you,
JP
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Fri Aug 26, 2011 1:59 am
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Courtlyn says...



post903973.html#p903973
I don't need any comments on punctuation/grammatical inconsistencies; I really just need it based on style, content, readability, etc. Thank you! :)
Idea? Drop me a line!
I love to research things.I do mostly nonfiction pieces such as current events, political/ethical/religious topics,and historical/scientific research.If you've a question you'd like answered or a topic about which you'd like to know more,I'll gladly write you a piece on it!
  





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Sat Aug 27, 2011 6:50 am
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Sassafras says...



If you're not too busy, I need you to read over this. topic86694.html

I've seen you give really good reviews and I'm in need of a really good review right now. Like I say, I personally don't like the beginning, the diary entry, and I'm thinking of replacing it with a short glimpse into my main character's future - as that is more exciting.

Anyway, I really want you to give this a thorough review.
A pale imitator of a girl in the sky.
  





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Sun Sep 11, 2011 4:32 pm
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joshuapaul says...



topic87441.html

Another one for you. Take your time it's in ten parts and rather long :)
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Wed Jan 25, 2012 12:53 am
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thetraveler says...



Do you mind reviewing for me?
Thanks :D
I just want to know if you like it, what you like if anything, if you don't like it, what I could do better :)
Thanks!
Cheers,
thetraveler
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SPOILED!!!
  





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Thu Jan 26, 2012 2:35 pm
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GoldenQuill says...



Buttercup!

Anyway, here's my most recent poem. Thanks in advance!
formerly ZlyWilk

Finally achieving my dreams. Dive into a unique horror story.
  








Owning our story can be hard but not nearly as difficult as spending our lives running from it. Embracing our vulnerabilities is risky but not nearly as dangerous as giving up on love and belonging and joy—the experiences that make us the most vulnerable. Only when we are brave enough to explore the darkness will we discover the infinite power of our light.
— Brené Brown