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Wed Mar 26, 2008 8:23 pm
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Griffinkeeper says...



Want something critiqued by a semi-amateur professional? Just post a link of your story below. Note: I only critique stories, poetry is my weak point.
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Autumn says...



A critique would be much appreciated! :)

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But there's still tomorrow
Forget the sorrow
And I can be on the last train home





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Done!
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chocoholic says...



Because I want this to be the best story I can make it,

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Thanks a lot!
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Jennafina says...



I would love a harsh critique! I just edited.

Benedict's Goodbye

Btw, my title is awful. If you have any ideas for a better, that would be awesome too. Thanks, Grif. :)
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omgafilangi says...



It's from awhile ago, but I need something to work on, and I actually liked this idea. Go ahead, go nuts :)

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Griffinkeeper says...



Done, more?
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deleted6 says...



Chasing Rainbows: Chapter 1 (Revised)
Chasing Rainbows

I really want this to be the best it can be. :)


Plus:

The Final Soliloquy Of the General

I want to get this published as I feel it's my best short story :).
We get off to the rhythm of the trigger and destruction. Fallujah to New Orleans with impunity to kill. We are the hidden fist of the free market.
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OverEasy says...



Here are chapters 1 and 2 of my story.

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Please and Thank you!
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Twit says...



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Bite hard. Please?
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OverEasy says...



One more for me please?

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Esmé says...



Hey,

Would you mind doing a critique for me also? Here's the link:

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("Saving Michael", under Fantasy)


Thanks, and cheers,
Esme





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Firearris says...



I don't think it's very good, but I'm looking for all the help i can get, so I can re-write it.

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Thanks!

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BigBadBear says...



Hey! I was wondering if you could check these out:

Pianissimo

Mezzo Forte

Thanks!

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Would love help on this.








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