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Thu May 29, 2008 8:38 pm
smorgishborg says...



Hey, Suzanne! Invasion of the Penis Snatchers is a bit long, but I'd really appreciate it if you could take a look.
The woods are lovely, dark and deep.
But I have promises to keep,
And miles to go before I sleep,
And miles to go before I sleep.
- Robert Frost

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Fri May 30, 2008 2:44 am
Sohini says...



Meow to you Suze,

I'd be happy if you could review my first Romance story:

http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/post375066.html#375066

Your opinions will be helpful.

Thanks,

Sohini.
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Tue Jun 03, 2008 5:10 pm
GML says...



If you have the time...
http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic31019.html

It's short!
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Wed Jun 04, 2008 2:59 pm
PenguinAttack says...



Hullo Ladykins.

I was wondering if I could perhaps have you glimpse this: It's called "What A Disguise Love Is" topic31101.html


Muchas love.

*Hearts* Le Penguin.
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Fri Jun 06, 2008 5:39 am
RandomGrrl says...



Hey Suzanne! You give fantastic crits, I've noticed. If you get a chance (no pressure) I'd love feedback on:
topic31184.html

Thanks! :D
RG





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Fri Jun 06, 2008 4:56 pm
Ringo_rules987 says...



I'd appreciate it if you critiqued this

Thanks in advance.





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Sun Jun 08, 2008 3:53 pm
Raimunda says...



Um

well

please may you please perhaps maybe if you could review me??

I have 1 art thingy.

And numerous story thingies.

And a blog thingamajig.

It would be ever so nice of you..

:)
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Mon Jun 09, 2008 12:52 am
Ross says...



Hey, Suzanne! Can you review post379609.html#379609

Thanks so much!
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Mon Jun 09, 2008 7:31 pm
scasha says...



Hey Suzanne!
Can you please critique Speechless? I'd love you forever :-)





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Thu Jun 12, 2008 12:08 am
Icaruss says...



I know you have a lot to do already, but if you can... It's a three-part story. It's called Tangled Up In Blue, and it's from the Romance Section. You can review the three parts, or just the first one, whatever you want.

topic31224.html
topic31268.html
topic31373.html

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Wed May 12, 2010 10:55 pm
Emerson says...



So, I've unlocked this thread because I'm reopening my requests. :D Look like this hasn't been open for almost a year!

Just be sure to read my comments in the first post :)
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Thu May 13, 2010 3:37 pm
Luvzi12 says...



Could you please review my story, Gingerbread - topic63471.html

Specifically, I was wondering if you could focus on characters, the ending and the suggestion that I have quoted in the piece itself (you'll see what I mean when you read it.)

Thanks so much! Feel free to pick it apart, any feedback is appreciated :)
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Fri May 14, 2010 12:31 am
Jas says...



ThinPrettyStrong-Lost


Could review my poem?
I am nothing
but a mouthful of 'sorry's, half-hearted
apologies that roll of my tongue, smoothquick, like 'r's
or maybe like pocket candy
that's just a bit too sweet.

~*~





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Sun May 16, 2010 4:33 am
NinjaCookieMonster says...



Please review this. It's only on thing, but it would be great if you reviewed my other stuff.
viewtopic.php?t=63686

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Sun May 16, 2010 12:44 pm
Lava says...



Suz!

Mind doing this for me? Frozen Rose
It's under Romantic Fiction and I would like some input on the flow so far and if the characters are pretty okay.

Thanks.
~Lava
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