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Tue May 18, 2010 6:11 pm
lilymoore says...



Hey Suz!
Do you mind reviewing this?
It's a short part to a two piece little romance story, like, 700 words. But I could really use an opinion on the flow of things and on the general tone...pwease. :)
Never forget who you are, for surely the world will not. Make it your strength. Then it can never be your weakness. Armor yourself in it, and it will never be used to hurt you.





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Wed May 19, 2010 8:00 pm
Esmé says...



Hello!

Would you critique topic63912.html? Under historical finction, part one of two of a short story.

Thanks in advance :)





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Thu May 20, 2010 9:56 am
jackle says...



Hello could you please reveiw the first chapter of my novel, Darkest Moments?
post676835.html#p676835
pretty please?
-Jackle
check it out - novel.php?id=1132





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Tue May 25, 2010 5:42 am
Lumi says...



viewtopic.php?t=60863
I am a forest fire and an ocean, and I will burn you just as much
as I will drown everything you have inside.
-Shinji Moon


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Tue May 25, 2010 1:23 pm
Yuriiko says...



can you review my story?

here's the link: http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic64143.html

thanks in advance!
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Fri May 28, 2010 1:10 am
silented1 says...



topic64305.html
[quote]If it's arguable, then it probably is." - Xeriana X

Link to my will review for food thread: topic71713.html





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Sat May 29, 2010 4:40 pm
Kale says...



Poor Conrad. His piece has been stuck with just 1 review for so long.

topic64106.html
Secretly a Kyllorac, sometimes a Murtle.
There are no chickens in Hyrule.
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Sat May 29, 2010 4:43 pm
Thegirlwholived says...



Hey! Could you please do post707464.html#p707464 for me!

Thanks
~Kim~
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Sat May 29, 2010 6:23 pm
Emerson says...



Note to Kyllorac (and everyone else):

(I guess I should put this rule on my main page)

I will not give reviews to someone who is not requesting it for themselves. So, essentially, you cannot request that I give reviews to another person; they should come ask me for the review themselves.

Besides, I already discussed that poem with Conrad via IM and in great detail. ;-) We're buds like that.
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Wed Jun 02, 2010 12:26 am
Adnamarine says...



Suz m'dear!

topic64445.html

Thanks so so much! (it's a poem)
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Thu Jun 17, 2010 5:03 pm
Kale says...



O Suz, I would be most humbled if you could rip apart this poem which I wrote for Rosey's contest.

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Secretly a Kyllorac, sometimes a Murtle.
There are no chickens in Hyrule.
Princessence: A LMS Project
WRFF | KotGR





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Fri Jun 18, 2010 1:27 pm
jayleighsmith says...



Hey, Suzanne.
Could you take a look at this for me? It is historical fiction and somewhat romantic as well. This is only the first chapter. Thanks so much, in advance.

viewtopic.php?t=65248



p.s. If the link does not work right, I'm sorry. I don't know how to post just the topicnumber as the link.
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Sun Jun 20, 2010 6:03 pm
LastPaladin says...



Hey Suzanne I realize this is under fantasy but it's very dark and unlike high fantasy it just in a made up land with treachery and turmoil ect.

post724941.html#p724941
You poor take courage
You rich take care
This earth was made a common treasury
For everyone to share
All things in common
All people one
We come in peace
The orders came to cut them down

Billy Bragg - The World Turned Upside Down





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Sun Jun 20, 2010 11:52 pm
blackbird12 says...



Hey there. :) Would you mind critiquing this for me? Thanks a bunch in advance.

http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic65349.html
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Mon Jun 21, 2010 2:30 am
screamandshout says...



topic65475.html
Hey could you take a look at this poem for me? Please and thank you.








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