Young Writers Society

Hi! Welcome to Yoshi's Island!

Jump down right there and ask for a good 'ol fashioned review from yoshi! I'd prefer if your request is something from the green room.

My reviewing priority list:
Poetry
Novels/Novellas
Short Stories
Anything else!

I will be able to review within a few days. If I don't, no need hesitate to jump onto my wall and scream "REVIEWWWWWSSSSSS" or something like that. I won't be offended-- don't worry.

When requesting from me, you can request either an old fashioned chronological review or a structured review. Some people prefer the old one and some people prefer the organized one. Whichever you prefer, please tell me.

What to expect:

If you are asking for poetry reviews, I'll most likely point out anything grammatical (Punctuation, spelling, etc.) and technical (Line structure, rhyming, alliteration, etc.), which may be annoying. If you don't want that and just want the plot-wise (Theme, mood, etc.) review, then tell me.

If you are asking for novel/novella or short story reviews, I'd prefer if you ask for a chronological review, because it's easier to read in a novel format. For these reviews, there will be grammatical pointers (Punctuation, spelling, etc.), technical pointers (Redundancies, unnecessary additions, etc.), and plot-wise pointers (Character growth, Realistic dialogue, etc.). If you do not want the grammatical or technical pointers, just tell me.

So . . . why are you still here?

Why don't you request a review! Don't be shy!

I'm honored to be your first requestee!

I am requesting reviews for my novel... The last few chapters I've posted have gotten stuck in the Green Room for a while, and I'd love any and all reviews you'd like to give ^-^

I'm only formally requesting a review on this chapter: Before The Dragon - Chapter 10.1 but I'm not going complain if you're interested in the story and want to read on

Context: Jerica is King's Assassin and also General of the Archers. Yesterday, she got shot with an arrow. She also made a mistake which resulted in her cousin Rek getting stabbed and she feels very guilty about it. She spent the night with him and this scene opens in the morning.

Derik is the War Lord and Rek's dad (so Jerica's uncle) and treats both of them really well. Levin is the King (and Rek and Jerica's uncle) and Lord Biryn is his head advisor and they both treat Jerica terribly.

I know that's a lot of characters and I'm sorry if it's confusing >.> Just thought it might help since I'm asking for feedback on a later chapter ^.^

Awesome! I may have actually reviewed one of your first chapters (Because the name "Jerica" sounds familiar o_O). I'll get to your reviews at least by tomorrow. Today I'm a little busy. (Plus, I'm going to be participating the January Reviewing contest that Tuck made-- it's starting tomorrow.)

Oh, and @ShadowVyper, do you want a Chronological review or a Structured review? I would usually go with Chronological for a novel/series, but it's your choice.

Ooh, that's possible! It's been so long since I originally started posting this I can't remember xD No worries, whenever you can get to it is great ^.^

I'm happy for whatever sort of review you want to give! Chronological sounds great if that's what you'd prefer since it's a novel, but I'm also fine with a structured review if that's easier. Either way is fine! I just appreciate feedback c:

Hiya, after seeing your lovely review on another of my works, I was wondering if you'd be able to review two more short stories of mine?
I've been thinking of submitting them to a magazine so all honest criticisms would be welcome

Song of a Muse

Dionysus

I'll quickly note here that they're both standalone stories.

Hi there!
It would be really great if you could leave a review on my short story Thought Patterns
Thank you for your time in advance

@Zenith Sure!

@QuoolQuo I am so sorry!!! I didn't see your message and now it's gotten full reviews! I guess I missed it in my notifications. Do you still want me to review it?

Hey, Yoshi.
I chose you every time in Mario Kart 64. Remember me?
I would appreciate a review on a song I’m working on called What's Wrong, recently posted. And how about we follow each other as well?
If it weren’t for Cloud I wouldn’t have read so far into that SB. Keep it up and I’ll make you my main in Super Smash loll
Oh yeah and I don’t want technical edits, because it’s a song. Thanks!

@LilPWilly sure! Haha do you like the "Yoshi Falls" map on Mario Kart? Idk if it's on 64, but i know for a fact that yoshi never falls at yoshi falls.

I'll get your review in soon!

Haha yes I like it. In 64 a giant egg comes down and SMASHES all my opponents. And also porcupines.

@Yoshikrab don’t worry about it, I’ve actually tried to take down both works because I submitted them to that magazine.
Anywho, I also forgot about my comment here so there’s no worries

Pls review Cortez Shivick( Chapter 1)

Waiting for the review

Exodus
SF novel-to-be, plz help with dialogue

Hello. Please review

Cortez Shivick(Chapter 10)