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Tue Apr 21, 2020 3:29 pm
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ShallowHouse says...



I just joined so I figured, if I'm going to have my story lovingly reviewed, I'll spread the love back!

I'll make a review from the first five chapters (or less if you're just starting out) but maybe more if you've really gotten me hooked! I swear, I'm easily hooked so I'll probably read more than what I said.
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I cannot for the love of anything, review Romance and Drama.
I can't think of anything else besides those for now.
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I'll probably be able to give the reviews about one to three days, depending on how busy I'll be with my job and obligations. These won't stop me from looking forward to your story though!

Format?
- Title
- Genre
- Short Introduction of your novel
- Link to the beginning chapter/prologue of your novel
- Anything in particular that you want me to make note of:
-- Fight scenes
-- Trigger warnings
-- Sexual Themes
-- Violence and/or Horror
-- (Any part or segment you want me to review specifically)

P. S. - Don't be shy I'm also new here so....
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Fri Apr 24, 2020 8:34 am
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felistia says...



Hi ShallowHouse and welcome to the site. :D

I'd love if you could have a look at my story.


- Title: Quest for Fire- Book One- Into the Mists

- Genre: Fantasy\Action\Adventure

- Short Introduction of your novel:

I'll try to give you a run down without spoiling anything.

The story is based in a fantasy world with dragons, dinosaurs and present day animals (no humans). Zoltar lives in the Shadow Talon dragon tribe. Certain events cause him to embark on a journey to find a mysterious jewel in order to save his tribe from extinction. We met lots of other characters along the way and get into many different situations.

I've finished the first book and I'm currently on the second book.


- Link to the beginning chapter/prologue of your novel: The Quest for Fire - Into the Mists - Chapter One



Thanks for taking a look in advance.

Best regards
felistia.
  





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Fri Apr 24, 2020 11:21 am
ShallowHouse says...



Thank you for the request, I'll get to reading it now!
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Mon Apr 27, 2020 3:36 am
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Hanuli says...



Hello! I would love it if you could review the first chapter of my new novel.

Title: ennui
Genre: Fantasy/mystery
Short intro: The story of a guy who forgot his name and his imaginary friend John.
Link: ennui - 01

Thank you!
  





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Mon Apr 27, 2020 11:08 am
ShallowHouse says...



@Hanuli

I hath reviewed thine chapter! Great job! I want to read more of it! <3
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Tue Apr 28, 2020 1:27 pm
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LittleLee says...



Could you review my chapters and prologue?
Title: None, I just say Chapter One or whatever.
Genre: Fantasy, Action, Adventure
Short introduction: My book is set in a fictional high fantasy world, but I can't really explain it without giving away parts of the story I haven't published!
Link: New Prologue to my book

Well, there's no need to review the prologue itself because it has plenty, but I'd appreciate it if you looked at the following chapters!
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madisonperkins59 says...



I would love it if you could come and review my book.

Title-The Long Journey
Genre-Health/ Non-fiction
Summary-Alexis,13 years old, diagnosed with spina bifida at birth struggles with mental health and acceptance until she discovers her purpose and her voice. She gets bullied at school and feels like she isn’t being heard until she starts writing.

Link:https://madisonperkins59.writerfeedpad.com/1
  





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Wed Sep 23, 2020 1:21 pm
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emilythebunnie says...



Hello! I am new here, I've been struggling to get people to review my work. my proudest short story is now posted here. it's a 45-minute read, so if you have the time to read it it would be much appreciated.
Thank you.

Title: land of magic
It's a short story roughly around 11000 words.
genre is Fantasy and Action/Adventure
Description
A young girl named Ari has her home torn apart by the kingdom she lives in. fulled by the hatred the crown prince exacts his revenge.

thank you for reviewing and reading my story.
Emilythebunnie
  





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Thu Sep 24, 2020 12:48 am
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RadDog13579 says...



Hey @ShallowHouse, RadDog here! I recently started a novel called The Harvest and am always looking for some good feedback. If you'd like to review it (there are 11 parts out now) you can here.
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Thu Sep 24, 2020 5:39 pm
ShallowHouse says...



hey, @emilythebunnie ! I tried to search for your short story, but I couldn't find it in your portfolio, sadly. Do you have a link to it? ouo
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ShallowHouse says...



Hello, @RadDog13579 ! I'm currently reading your novel and I'll give my review on the latest chapter soon! I won't be reviewing your prior chapters, as I'm sure you've learned from the others' reviews, but I'll be reading your story from the start!
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Mon Oct 12, 2020 1:30 pm
daniel.agranovsky says...



Hey @ShallowHouse, I wrote my first novel too, would be great if you can have a read:

https://www.amazon.com/Who-Lies-Will-No ... B08KNTJ3CN
  





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Tue Nov 10, 2020 7:41 pm
Soccer23 says...



Hi!
If you could review this, that would be awesome!

@Daniel.agranovsky you actually got something published! Whoa!
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Thu Nov 12, 2020 9:57 pm
MaybeAndrew says...



Hey, @ShallowHouse! I like the name, I have a longer short story that's probably gonna come in like 4 pieces that I would like reviewed!

Title: To Know
- Genre:
Narrative I guess?
- Short Introduction of your novel
It's surrounding three teens who find a strange series of clues left by a deadman that seem to be leading to a mysterious work of modern art.
- Link to the beginning chapter/prologue of your novel To Know: Part 0ne
- Anything in particular that you want me to make note of:
Each page of the story was one step of the hero's journey, I did this as an experiment to see if I could make a full arc and satisfying story in only twelve pages. So commentary on if and how the story feels would be good
-- Fight scenes
none really
-- Trigger warnings
It mentions getting burned and burning buildings at the end
-- Sexual Themes
None
-- Violence and/or Horror
No, unless you count the burning bit at the end.
-- (Any part or segment you want me to review specifically)
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Sun Oct 10, 2021 11:54 am
MissGangamash says...



Hey!

I'm here looking for reviews!

- Title Fool Without A Master
- Genre Historical Fantasy/romance
- Short Introduction of your novel I know you said you don't review romance but this is more of a character study that includes a romance. Basically the novel is a biography written by a jester looking back on his life when he was having an affair with the prince and struggling with his own sense of identity
- Link to the beginning chapter/prologue of your novel https://www.youngwriterssociety.com/work.php?id=152359#c722790
- Anything in particular that you want me to make note of: It's character driven so mainly what works/doesn't work in that element.

Let me know if you're interested :)
  








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