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Tue Aug 24, 2021 4:06 pm
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IamI says...



Okay, thanks!
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Tue Aug 24, 2021 6:41 pm
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fatherfig says...



could you review we all walk upsidedown ?
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Tue Aug 24, 2021 8:04 pm
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RandomTalks says...



Hey!

If you are up for it, I would really appreciate it if you could review my short novella The Old Man And The Boy. It has 8 parts and is a rather simple story.

Here's the link for the first part!

The Old Man And The Boy 1

If you are interested, I can send you the rest of the links or you can just find it there.

Let me know!
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Wed Aug 25, 2021 2:29 pm
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Liminality says...



@queenshadowgem Sure thing! I'll try to get to that before next week.

@RandomTalks I could! Might take quite a bit longer though, but I hope I can get through all that during RevMo. Looks like an interesting story :D
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Mon Oct 11, 2021 8:18 pm
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MissGangamash says...



Hi! Could you review my last two chapters? Fool Without A Master (Chapter 3 Part 2) and the next one. Or just the last if you can only do one.
  





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Mon Oct 11, 2021 11:33 pm
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Liminality says...



Sure @MissGangamash! I'll try to get those reviewed by maybe next week.
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Thu Oct 14, 2021 4:59 pm
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Hkumar says...



Hey Lim!

I would love to get some constructive feedback on this poem the inevitable. It already has some sweet reviews but I was hoping for something that would help in improvising.
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Sat Oct 16, 2021 1:38 am
Liminality says...



@Hkumar I've just reviewed that piece! And @MissGangamash I'll get to the chapter after that one soonish!
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Wed Oct 27, 2021 1:34 pm
Liminality says...



@MissGangamash Just wanted to let you know that I've been really busy lately and I'm not sure if I can get to that second chapter :c Really sorry about that. Hopefully when things settle down after NaNo, I can swing by and review your later chapters or something else that needs reviewing?
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Wed Oct 27, 2021 2:00 pm
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MissGangamash says...



Liminality wrote:@MissGangamash Just wanted to let you know that I've been really busy lately and I'm not sure if I can get to that second chapter :c Really sorry about that. Hopefully when things settle down after NaNo, I can swing by and review your later chapters or something else that needs reviewing?


That's fine, no problem! Whenever you can, just read the latest I've uploaded :D
  





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Sun Nov 21, 2021 3:43 am
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RealSadhours296 says...



I'm not sure if this is still open, but I was wondering if you could check out this novel I've been working on? It's not finished yet, but I'm trying my best to update it consistently. The more feedback I get on it the better I can pinpoint whether it's something worth turning into a full on novel series. Let me know if you're interested, or if not I completely understand.

Eclipse: Chapter 1
  





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Sun Nov 21, 2021 3:50 am
Liminality says...



Hi @RealSadhours296! I've read the content warnings and unfortunately I don't think I'd be comfortable giving a very thorough review of this work. I do hope you'll manage to get more reviews on it from some other YWS-ers though!
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Sun Nov 21, 2021 3:55 am
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RealSadhours296 says...



It's no problem! Thank you for considering it! ^v^
  





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Mon Nov 22, 2021 7:28 pm
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Fishr says...



He Buried His Wife in The Unmarked Grave
The sadness drains through me rather than skating over my skin. It travels through every cell to reach the ground. I filter it yet strangely enough, I keep what was pure and it is the dirt that leaves.
  





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Tue Apr 26, 2022 7:45 am
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RandomTalks says...



Hi Liminality! I saw that this was open so I have arrived with another request! I wrote this short story back in February and received a few good reviews. But I am thinking of submitting this to a magazine, so I would really appreciate it if you could review it for me?

Long Way To Go
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