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Sun Apr 28, 2019 2:17 am
ShadowVyper says...

All caught up! Anyone else?
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Mon May 27, 2019 9:15 am
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felistia says...

Hi ShadowVyper

Could you review my Quest for Fire novel?

Title: The Quest for Fire

Link: The Quest for Fire - Into the Mists - Chapter One

Description: It's a story with dragons as the main characters.

Spoiler! :
The story revolves around one tribe of dragons trying to find a way out of their homeland (a volcano has erupted laying waste to the land). The find a suitable home after three years of searching the whole continent of Megalonia. The island is filled with vegetation and animals and seems to be uninhabited by any native dragon tribes.

Notes: I've written seven chapters so far and I'm looking for someone to review each chapter in the novel and focus mainly on plot and character based criticism.

Thanks again.

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Wed Jun 05, 2019 12:16 am
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Saichi says...

Link to Piece: The Origin: Prologue
Type of Piece (Whether it's a novel, poetry, etc): It's a novel
Age rating: 12+
Any other comments (Optional):Would be a great help! Thank you so much!

The bigger the issue, the smaller you write. Remember that. You don’t write about the horrors of war. No. You write about a kid’s burnt socks lying on the road. You pick the smallest manageable part of the big thing, and you work off the resonance.
— Richard Price