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Sun Apr 28, 2019 2:17 am
Shady says...



All caught up! Anyone else?

"u and rina are systematically watering down the grammar of yws" - Atticus
"From the fish mother to the fish death god." - lehmanf
"A fish stole my identity. I blame shady" - Omni
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Mon May 27, 2019 9:15 am
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felistia says...



Hi ShadowVyper

Could you review my Quest for Fire novel?

Title: The Quest for Fire

Link: The Quest for Fire - Into the Mists - Chapter One

Description: It's a story with dragons as the main characters.

Spoiler! :
The story revolves around one tribe of dragons trying to find a way out of their homeland (a volcano has erupted laying waste to the land). The find a suitable home after three years of searching the whole continent of Megalonia. The island is filled with vegetation and animals and seems to be uninhabited by any native dragon tribes.


Notes: I've written seven chapters so far and I'm looking for someone to review each chapter in the novel and focus mainly on plot and character based criticism.

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Wed Jun 05, 2019 12:16 am
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Saichi says...



Link to Piece: The Origin: Prologue
Type of Piece (Whether it's a novel, poetry, etc): It's a novel
Age rating: 12+
Any other comments (Optional):Would be a great help! Thank you so much!
  





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Wed Aug 12, 2020 8:33 pm
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Shady says...



Beep boop, back to the front page I go~

"u and rina are systematically watering down the grammar of yws" - Atticus
"From the fish mother to the fish death god." - lehmanf
"A fish stole my identity. I blame shady" - Omni
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Thu Aug 13, 2020 3:17 am
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Atticus says...



Hey Shades! If you're up for it, I'd appreciate a review on my new poem! I'm not looking for specific critiques on this poem, more so just a general critique of my style and a thoughtful analysis of how the poem made you feel and how I could make those feelings more potent. I know you specialize in thoughtful analyses, so I figure I came to the right place ;)
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Thu Aug 13, 2020 4:05 am
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mellifera says...



Shady!

If you're willing, I'm always down for more reviews on the novel I was writing for LMS! Maybe the first chapter or two, if you're so inclined or however many you feel like! I'm not looking for anything specific in the smaller chunks, so tear into whatever you like!

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Thu Aug 13, 2020 4:24 am
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Shady says...



Ahh! So much WRFF love! Thanks guys! <3

@Tuckster, your review is done!

@mellifera, I'll get to your reviews asap, scribberino! I am like 4 reviews away from ALL BLUE STARS and I am SO here for earning them on your lovely LMS novel.

"u and rina are systematically watering down the grammar of yws" - Atticus
"From the fish mother to the fish death god." - lehmanf
"A fish stole my identity. I blame shady" - Omni
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Fri Aug 14, 2020 6:22 pm
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KateHardy says...



Hi @ShadowVyper

I have a couple of novel chapter to offer. They are pretty much parts 2 and three so I don't think they need a synopsis but basically all that happens in the first part is this team lands at the location of a meeting and the meeting is called to order.

Here are the chapters:

The Alpha Pack: The Dawn of the Dead, Chapter 1.2

The Alpha Pack: The Dawn of the Dead, Chapter 2

Thanks in advance.
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Wed Sep 02, 2020 3:50 am
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Omni says...



Hi Shady, <3 I am here for uhhh XD requesting reviews for my novel

here is the portfolio profile/Omnom/portfolio/475986 right now there is only two chapters but i want to get three more out sometime this month ^^
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Thu Sep 03, 2020 11:37 pm
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MissGangamash says...



If you're still accepting review requests, could you check out my novel 'The Rage' that I'm currently uploading? It's a vampire novel set in a small village. It's a prequel to another novel I uploaded on here a while ago. Basically 'The Rage' is set in 2020 and the human population are discovering that vampires actually exist and live among them. I'm looking for readers willing to read chapter by chapter as I'm looking for reviews on how the story is progressing and how the characters and the relationships between them are being portrayed. Here's a link to the first chapter! The Rage (Chapter 1)
  





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Wed Dec 02, 2020 8:14 pm
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Hkumar says...



Hi Shady!

My poem Co-rumination is still sitting in the green room. If you get time then can you please review it, I will love to know your thoughts <3
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Fri Dec 04, 2020 8:51 pm
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lchoi says...



Hi! Could you review my new short story? Thank you so much in advance.

the after - 1/2
  





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Tue Dec 29, 2020 2:47 am
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Shady says...



All caught up ^-^

"u and rina are systematically watering down the grammar of yws" - Atticus
"From the fish mother to the fish death god." - lehmanf
"A fish stole my identity. I blame shady" - Omni
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Thu Dec 31, 2020 12:59 am
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lillianna says...



hello! would you mind reviewing my poem? the last time
i would prefer to be called mrs. harry styles.
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Hijinks says...



Hey Shady! I'd super duper adore a fishy review on one of my poems:
Fairytale of tasks
Thanks! <3
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