Young Writers Society

Welcome to the Vyper's Den!

Come on in, make yourself comfortable. I'm glad you're here!

Clearly, since you're reading this, you've written something that you'd like feedback on. So I'll give you some general expectations for what you'll be getting if you request one from me!



My style tends to be making comments about anything that stands out to me as I'm reading. That means I'll point out specific phrases/bits of dialogue/descriptions that I really liked and thought you did a great job with -- as well as awkward bits that you can improve upon. I try to give specific, concrete examples of what I'm talking about, taken directly from your own work.

I will then give you a general overview of my thoughts about your piece as a whole. This is generally where you'll get critiques on pacing, flow, characters, plot, etc. The stuff that relates to your story as a whole.

I'm not great at self-promotion, but I generally look at reviewers' past work before I request a review from them, so feel free to do the same and check out my past reviews if you want to see the sort of review you'll be getting.

My Preferences

I write action/adventure and fantasy and I read sci-fi so those are what I'm most comfortable with and are what I will probably be able to give you the best feedback on. However, I'm open to other genres as well. It's just possible that I won't be able to provide quite as thorough as feedback on them.


I retain the right to refuse any review for any reason -- but in general there's not much that I'm not willing to review. I'm a bit squeamish so overly graphic horror (especially supernatural!) I will likely not be able to get through, but feel free to request it, and I'll see if it's too grisly for me to stomach.

I won't review actively anti-religious pieces either, but with a caveat. I am a Christian and I don't enjoy reading pieces that are just talking about how stupid/wrong/etc. Christians are for their beliefs. However, if you take the time to write a thoughtful essay on the matter and you're looking for feedback on how a Christian would answer your arguments, I'm totally down for that. Here is an example of when I did just that.

Does anyone want to feed my Rampage?

Hi Shadow!

Could you review Luminous: Cicadas (Prologue) ?

It's a 2,500 word prologue for a fantasy novel I'm writing. I'm mostly looking for feedback on story, characters, and pacing, but any suggestions or constructive criticism would be appreciated if you'd like to check it out.

Will do! I’m traveling now but I’ll try to get it done on Thursday! @AlyTheBookworm

Done!

Heya! Would you mind reading this? You don't need any knowledge of the fandom to understand what's going on.

La pluie de l'aprés-midi (Miraculous Ladybug - 1)

Done! Anyone else?

Hey Shady! Care to review my latest post, Thorne (1) ? I don't know if this is a genre you are open to reading (you didn't specify otherwise). It's the first installment of a horror story.

Hello


I'm just here to stop by to say hi.

Hey @OofOof1!

Thanks for dropping by to say hello! But just so you know, this is my thread in Will Review For Food, which means that this is the place where you can leave a link to one of your literary works to ask me specifically to review it for you. That way if you have a specific person you'd like to review a specific work, then you have a place to ask them to do that.

If you're just looking for some chit-chat, then going to someone's personal profile and writing on their wall is a great option for that (just click on a person's username by their avatar) or you could even send them a personal message using the banner at the top of thte screen. You can also check out The Lounge or Randomosity if you're looking for some casual chatting grounds with other users!

Hi! I wrote an action/fantasy story. It is my life's work and I would love if you reviewed it to help make my writing better. It is called Abnormals (Part One).

Thank you!
-Jade

All done! Anyone else?

Hello! I am back again - Could you review part of this working prologue for a possible new story?

Thanks!

work/manilla/Argent--Prologue-11-143807#c668362

I'd be happy to, @manilla! Looks like that work is set to private, though :/ Could you make it public first?

Hey, don't know if you are still accepting but my BONETAKER story currently only has 1 review so I would love some feedback on it! It's marked as Horror but there is nothing graphic save for the mention of a little bit of blood, but if that's not your cup of tea don't worry It does mention religion but it's not my own view and one character is a christian themselves
I also have some poetry I'd love reviewed- Solider, movement or monster, If you don't want to review the story.
Thanks so much for your time