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Fri Feb 14, 2020 2:51 pm
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Softballgirl333 says...



Hey Alliyah! I was wondering if you could take a look at my two most recent poems!

Take as long as you need and if you can only review one please review "My Best Friend"


I have never requested a review before, so by asking for a link I assume you mean this?
https://www.youngwriterssociety.com/work/Softballgirl333/I-am-Queer-146510
https://www.youngwriterssociety.com/work/Softballgirl333/My-Best-Friend-146535


Edit: I am not looking for anything in particular with these reviews,
~Let your smile change the world, but don't let the world change your smile.~ <3
  





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Sun Mar 01, 2020 9:23 am
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ChrisCalaid says...



I need someone to review my poems:
Death
Cup of tea
  





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Fri May 01, 2020 3:19 pm
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Hijinks says...



Hello @alliyah! I would love it if you looked at my poem: Lonely Company
Thank you so much for considering!
Last edited by Hijinks on Fri May 08, 2020 1:05 am, edited 1 time in total.
When you're faced with something you don't understand, I think the most natural thing but also least interesting thing you can be is afraid.

-- Hank Green

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(previously whatchamacallit and Seirre)
  





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Thu May 07, 2020 1:07 am
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Atticus says...



Hey @alliyah! I'd love it if you could take a look at these two poems:
Tattooed On My Heart
Bullet On My Dresser
Thank you so much!
[he/him]

"tiktok and giving children meth are my passions" ~ @ShadowVyper
"carinas long foretold chaos protege" ~ @veeren
"smol bean, future of chaos" ~ @carina
  





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Sun May 31, 2020 1:57 am
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Starve says...



Hello alliyah !

I value the advice in your reviews and I was hoping you could review the second draft of this first villanelle I wrote —https://www.youngwriterssociety.com/work/Traves/Last-walk-2nd-draft-147517

I don't need anything too detailed , just some main pointers for a next draft. I'm trying to improve the work since editing is my weak point.

Thanks!
  





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Fri Jun 12, 2020 12:04 pm
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ChrisCalaid says...



Can you review my newly published poem?

Under the sunlight
Under the sunlight
  





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Fri Jun 12, 2020 2:10 pm
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Haraya says...



Hi alliyah! I've read around and found out you're really passionate about poetry. I've also looked at some of your reviews and you went into detail to analyze the poems. I hope you could do the same for me.

Here is the link to my poem!
From East to West
  





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Mon Aug 17, 2020 7:23 am
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LittleLee says...



Great Mistress of poetry, may I request a review for my work, City of the Stars ?
"I believe a man does what he can until his destiny is revealed to him."
  





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Sun Sep 20, 2020 8:50 pm
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alliyah says...



Aha ~ after many months I have caught up! Review thread is open for poetry for RevMo! :)

Edit: nevermind! :)
you should know i am a time traveler &
there is no season as achingly temporary as now
but i have promised to return
  





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Thu Dec 10, 2020 6:19 pm
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Hijinks says...



Hey alliyah! I know this thread is closed, but there are a couple of poems I'd adore alliyah-reviews on, so I'm just going to drop them here for when you reopen this thread.

Heat Absorption Lab

baked goods in the mirror

Absolutely no rush or pressure to get to them anytime soon! Just whenever life is less busy and you have the chance and are in the mood for some reviewing <3
When you're faced with something you don't understand, I think the most natural thing but also least interesting thing you can be is afraid.

-- Hank Green

they/them
(previously whatchamacallit and Seirre)
  





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Thu Dec 10, 2020 6:43 pm
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alliyah says...



Yay! :) I will actually get to these !!! I also owe you a review for checklist challenge so this is a perfect reminder to myself not to forget that.

@starlitmind @editorandperks @ShadowVyper @Valkyria @harryhardy @IcyFlame @mellifera @tuckster @gravitemwhatisyournewusername @THECuRSEDCAT @Vil

You can help me remember that I owe you a review by leaving a link here for a work you want reviewed, trying to wrap this up by 2021. thank you for your abundant patience.
you should know i am a time traveler &
there is no season as achingly temporary as now
but i have promised to return
  





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Thu Dec 10, 2020 6:58 pm
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Shady says...



Yay! Reviews!

I haven't written any poetry in the past several weeks, but I experimented a bit with one of my more recent poems, and I'd love to know what you think about my stylistic choices/the work as a whole :D

there is no failure without 'i'

"u and rina are systematically watering down the grammar of yws" - Atticus
"From the fish mother to the fish death god." - lehmanf
"A fish stole my identity. I blame shady" - Omni
[they/he]
  





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Thu Dec 10, 2020 7:49 pm
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Riverlight says...



I was thinking about the reviews and personalized poems this morning, so thanks for reading my mind XD

I revised my first YWS work, and you reviewed the original. Here's the new one--

The Devil's Song of Ismelda the Sixth (Revised)
The politics of the world may be corrupt, but that does not mean that we must be corrupted ourselves.
  





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Fri Dec 11, 2020 12:05 pm
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mythh says...



@alliyah, I really have nothing I want your criticism on currently. I wanna save that for when I write something better :)

edit: something better than all I've written so far
The name's Myth.
  





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Tue Dec 15, 2020 3:36 pm
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Valkyria says...



Here's a little poem I wrote!

Would It Be So Bad?
There is always something left to love.
- One Hundred Years of Solitude
  








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