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Sat Oct 21, 2017 3:02 pm
zaminami says...



Sure. I'll get to it when I get a computer :D
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Sun Oct 29, 2017 7:40 pm
zaminami says...



@MJTucker -- Can you do the template for the chapters I didn't do yet?

@whatchamacallit; @Samk642 -- can you do the template as well?
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Sun Oct 29, 2017 7:58 pm
Tuckster says...



I will work on that when I get a chance. Would Tuesday work for you?
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Sun Oct 29, 2017 8:13 pm
zaminami says...



Yep, though now would be even better of course :wink:
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Mon Oct 30, 2017 5:09 pm
whatchamacallit says...



Teehee it's the prologue, so, you know...
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Mon Oct 30, 2017 11:10 pm
shima says...



Could you please review my monologue? The title is - Last Exit to Now/Here.
  





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Mon Oct 30, 2017 11:52 pm
zaminami says...



Use the template, please. I will not review unless you use the template
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Wed Nov 15, 2017 9:45 pm
inktopus says...



Title: The Moon Needs Her Night
Link: The Moon Needs Her Night Chapter 17
Genre(s): Action/adventure and fantasy
Content Rating: I think I have it rated 16+?
Type of review: I don't know what you mean by that
Type of piece: Chapter
insert profound quote here

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Wed Nov 15, 2017 9:53 pm
zaminami says...



@StormCloud:

Different types of reviews that can be requested:

Extremely detailed novel/short story (ED)
Normal novel/short story (NNSS)
Poetry/Lyrical (PL)
Line-by-Line novel/short story (LBLNSS)


ED:

Spoiler! :
Hello, StormCloud! It’s Kara here for a (hopefully) quick review!

Give me your soul.

With that aside...

STOP! Grammar Time!:



Grammar - Mechanics:

Here I will describe the spelling, punctuation, capitalization, and paragraphs.

Grammar - Dialogue:

Here is grammar as applied to dialogue.

Grammar - Other:

This applies to typos and things other than mechanics and dialogue:

Plot:



Setting:



Character:



MC:

Minor Character:

MiC:

PoV:

Otherwise?

Believability:



Clarity:



Engagement:



Krazy Kara Komments:



Overall:



Give me your soul --

Kara

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NNSS:

Spoiler! :
Hello, StormCloud! It’s Kara here for a (hopefully) quick review!

Give me your soul.

With that aside...

STOP! Grammar time!



I'm just going to mark the ones I can with red because I'm too lazy to write explanations.

Suggestions:



Confusing things:



Other comments, reactions, and fangirling:



Overall:



Give me your soul --

Kara

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PL:

Spoiler! :
Hello Stormcloud! Kara here for a (hopefully) quick review!

Give me your soul.

With that aside, I'm not the best at poetry but here we go!

Bold = grammar and flow issues.
Italics = suggestions and overall
Strikethrough = remove
Underline = krazy Kara komments.

[spoiler*][/*spoiler]

My interpretation:



Overall:



Why haven’t you given me your soul yet? --

Kara

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LBLNSS:

Spoiler! :
Hello, wordwing! Welcome to YWS! It’s Kara here for a (hopefully) quick review!

Give me your soul.

With that aside...

Because of all of the mistakes (sorry) I'm going to review this like I do poetry.

Bold = grammar and flow issues.
Italics = suggestions and overall
Strikethrough = remove
Underline = krazy Kara komments.

[spoiler*][/*spoiler]

Overall:



Give me your soul --

Kara

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Wed Nov 15, 2017 10:19 pm
inktopus says...



Ah thanks.

Title: The Moon Needs Her Night
Link: The Moon Needs Her Night Chapter 17
Genre(s): Action/adventure and fantasy
Content Rating: I think I have it rated 16+?
Type of review: nnss
Type of piece: Chapter
insert profound quote here

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Thu Nov 16, 2017 1:32 am
zaminami says...



Got it!
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Tue Dec 05, 2017 8:34 pm
shima says...



So, would you be so kind to review a small monologue/short story of mine ? Thanks !

Exit monologue (for a situationship)
  





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Tue Dec 05, 2017 10:48 pm
zaminami says...



Use the code please @shima
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Wed Dec 06, 2017 10:12 am
shima says...



Title: Exit monologue (for a situationship)
Link:Exit monologue (for a situationship)
Genre(s):Narrative, dramatic
Content Rating: 18+
Type of review: Content + some ideas on how to make it better
Type of piece: Monologue/phone call
  





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Sun Jun 24, 2018 4:01 am
aulyasela3597 says...



Hello! :)

So, I heard that you like Horror stuffs? How about an urban legend of ghost in my country ?

Would you like to read and give a review for my work? >>> Indonesian Ghost Mythology

I'm looking forward to receiving your expertise :)
  








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