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Sun Jan 22, 2017 5:36 pm
Lumi says...



You won't get nitpicks or candy-coating from me. I genuinely enjoy reading your writing, so understand that all criticism comes from a point of encouragement. That's all.

What I'll Review
--> Poetry
--> Novels
--> Art
--> Other

What I Won't Review
--> Short Stories
--> Articles/Essays
I am a forest fire and an ocean, and I will burn you just as much
as I will drown everything you have inside.
-Shinji Moon


I am the property of Rydia, please return me to her ship.
  





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Sun Jan 22, 2017 7:04 pm
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MeatBunCat says...



Glorious Fantasy Ch.1: A New world

I mostly wanna know what you think while reading it.

Plz and thank you~
  





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Sun Jan 22, 2017 7:26 pm
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Dest says...



Could you review this work? Dreaded Dinner Party
  





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Sun Jan 22, 2017 9:20 pm
Lumi says...



Donezo.
I am a forest fire and an ocean, and I will burn you just as much
as I will drown everything you have inside.
-Shinji Moon


I am the property of Rydia, please return me to her ship.
  





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Tue Jan 24, 2017 4:58 pm
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oceansrise says...



The Cyclical Nature of History

Could you please review this poem/prose thing I wrote?
Thank you!
  





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Mon Jan 30, 2017 3:28 pm
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tigeraye says...



I am looking for additional feedback on Voices of the Ice: Chapter 1

thank you very much.
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Tue Jan 31, 2017 7:20 am
Lumi says...



Done-r and Blitzen.
I am a forest fire and an ocean, and I will burn you just as much
as I will drown everything you have inside.
-Shinji Moon


I am the property of Rydia, please return me to her ship.
  





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Thu Feb 23, 2017 7:45 pm
GoldenQuill says...



Hey Lumi. If you're still open, I'd love for you to read anything of my Still Stone book that's up (so far). I was silly and didn't separate chapter one into different parts for length, so it appears quite long.
Feel free to review whatever of it you'd like to -- even if it's in the middle, or at the end. I'd really like some new perspective and fresh eyes!
Thank you!

Still Stone - one.
Still Stone - two. (part one.)
Still Stone - two. (part two.)
formerly ZlyWilk

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Thu Feb 23, 2017 7:50 pm
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CrimsonQuill says...



Up for a little change, Lumi? C:

If you have the time, Golden and I would love to have you review & critique the book cover(s) we made together for her book Edge.

I posted them over here if you wanna check them out. :mrgreen:

Thankyou!!
No matter the task, it can be accomplished if you want it badly enough.


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Fri Feb 24, 2017 3:02 am
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Sun Feb 26, 2017 1:39 am
Feltrix says...



Need reviews for the Myriad: Ascension Prologue through Chapter 3. I don't know how to make links, but they'll be in my the Myriad folder of my portfolio. I won't be insulted if you don't review them all.
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Fri Mar 03, 2017 3:48 am
Queenie says...



Hi! I was wondering if you could review the poem I wrote called Cruel Crown. :D
Cruel Crown
"Clouds come floating into my life, no longer to carry rain or usher storm, but to add color to my sunset sky."

-Rabindranath Tagore
  





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Sat Mar 04, 2017 3:51 pm
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skylnn00writes says...



Hey! So my work is kind of long with 5 chapters in one so if you stop half way through it is completely understandable. If you could please give me some of your feedback it would mean a lot to me. Thank you!

Here is the link:
(Undecided) #1: Ch. 1-5
~Sky <3
  





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Wed Mar 29, 2017 5:42 pm
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zaminami says...



Can you review my first poem: What Death Looks Like? I really need help; this is my first one and I really need a thorough review.

Thanks! :D
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Fri Apr 21, 2017 4:04 am
Lumi says...



Back open for business once I get the backlog taken care of. :)
I am a forest fire and an ocean, and I will burn you just as much
as I will drown everything you have inside.
-Shinji Moon


I am the property of Rydia, please return me to her ship.
  








The blood jet is poetry and there is no stopping it.
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