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Tue May 09, 2017 9:48 pm
Lumi says...



Donezo.
I am a forest fire and an ocean, and I will burn you just as much
as I will drown everything you have inside.
-Shinji Moon


I am the property of Rydia, please return me to her ship.
  





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Thu Jun 08, 2017 12:58 am
beccalicious94 says...



Pick me =] Nostos

I must warn you though, "poetry" was the best category I could come up with since it's largely images/narrative though it doesn't adhere to any traditional line breaks/meter. Does that make me horrible? XD
  





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Mon Jul 10, 2017 8:07 pm
EKK15 says...



As Things Became Real

Goodbye

Wander

Could you review any of these for me? I wanna make them better
  





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Mon Nov 20, 2017 1:20 pm
ChocoDanish says...



i need help with my tenses n my pace. pick whichever u like

Beginning (part1)
Family and Friends (part2)
Fluffs (part3)
i'm nice most of the time but i'm no saint
  








The bigger the issue, the smaller you write. Remember that. You don’t write about the horrors of war. No. You write about a kid’s burnt socks lying on the road. You pick the smallest manageable part of the big thing, and you work off the resonance.
— Richard Price