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Wed Jul 06, 2016 9:22 pm
Eternity says...



Request reviews here!

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Hello, Eternity here to Review Your Work!

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Comment Below and I'll get to any works ASAP.
  





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Thu Jul 07, 2016 11:51 pm
yizhongt says...



Hey there,please review:

Heroes of Aldrizhon: Return of the Banished (Prologue & Chapter 1)

If you have the time, could you review the second chapter as well? Thanks in advance!
  





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Thu Jul 07, 2016 11:55 pm
Eternity says...



Sure! I wouldn't mind at all. I'll review both Ch. 1 and Ch. 2 soon. If you look on my wall, I just rescued a kitten so I have to care for it right now but as soon as I clean him up and stuff, I'll get straight to it!
  





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Fri Jul 08, 2016 4:07 am
writerkitty says...



Hello there Eternity! :D
Can you please review, The Myth- Chapter one; Worst day ever.
I know that it already has a lot of reviews, but I'm hoping to re-write it, and I just need more ideas. Also, I'm hoping to show the first chapter to my English teacher, so I really need to make it better.

:D Thank you!!!!

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I saw the picture of the little kitten you rescued, sooo cute!!!! ^_^

Just keep writing, writing, WRITING! :D
  





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Fri Jul 08, 2016 4:10 am
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Eternity says...



Hello, dear. Of course!! I'll review it as soon as I can.

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awe thank you. gremlin is such a doll <3
  





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Tue Jul 12, 2016 9:02 pm
Laurenh6 says...



Hi there ! I've just improved Chapter 1 of my story - could you please give me some advice?

Does it keep you hooked? Anything I could improve?

Thank you so much :) :)


Watching


Lauren
  





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Fri Jul 15, 2016 10:25 am
Irrlichtchen says...



Hi :)

Could you maybe review my short story "Clawing stroke"?

Clawing Stroke

I wrote it a while ago and I want to improve it.
Thanks in advance!
  





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Wed Dec 28, 2016 7:07 pm
Eternity says...



Legitimately, I am going to review everything I possibly can for this RD.

Request a review below, and I will get started! My goal for RD is 75 well-written reviews, so the more the better!
  





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Wed Dec 28, 2016 9:29 pm
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Amazing! I will get to those ASAP for RD! Thank you! @CarryOnMrCaulfield
  





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Thu Dec 29, 2016 12:10 am
yizhongt says...



Hey there, could you please review the prologue and first chapter of my fantasy action/adventure story?

Magik: Search for the Tome (Prologue &amp; Chapter 1)

Thanks in advance!
  








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