Young Writers Society

Hi Mage! I have another one for you to review!

Title: 3 a.m.
Link: 3 a.m.
Description: I danced down the hall with her, but she was dead while doing so.
Other: 18+ for language

Okay! I promised to review some other things away from this thread, so I'll review that when I'm done with them! You should have your review in about a week.

Hi! Could you please review my poem:

Title: Tree on her back
Link: Tree on her back
Description: Its just a short poem, really, about the big black tree carved by the big black society on a young girl's back (and soul).
Other: N/A

Thanks!

I'm sorry, @DarshayataDeka, but, even though I would love to help you out by reviewing your work, I don't review poetry. Since I don't have much knowledge on writing it, I can't be helpful with my reviews. But I'd be happy to read any short stories that you've written!

@Mage Its okay. I would have loved to have one of my short stories reviewed by you, but, till now, I've written none.

Thanks for the request, @AneiDoru!

Your story has been reviewed! I reviewed Chapter 4 as well because I'm completely hooked.

Hiya! Here's that story I've been meaning to write to you about. ^_^

Work: After the Fall
Link: After the Fall - Chapters 1 & 2
Brief Description: There's a lot of stories about people running away to join the circus. Molly and her dad, Jon, are running from it.
Other: These are just the first two chapters, but I have more that I can publish if you'd like to have a look.

Thank you!!!

I'll review those as soon as I can! I love the description you included - I'm pretty intrigued, @AllisontheWriter!

@kirishimaxbokuguo, which work do you want reviewed? I checked out your Shallow Life portfolio and say that you had multiple ones there. I'm assuming you wanted me to read Part 1? My other question is in regards to the length of your work. I'm sure it's a wonderful work, but it's too long. I don't have the time or the focus to review such a gigantic work. I would suggest making it into other chapters. If you need more points to do that, I'd suggest making a thread in this section of the site.

Please tell me when you either make the work shorter and/or separate the chapters.

Work: Voices In My Head: Chapter 1
Link: Voices In My Head: Chapter 1
Brief Description: Be More Chill Fanfiction
Other: People have told me there wasn't enough description in here, which I did kind of intentionally, directing it towards people who already knew the musical. Sorry if it's confusing!

I'll gladly review that, @SarukaTheHuman! I just don't know too much about [i]Be More Chill[i], but I'll try my best to help you out.

Your review is up, @SarukaTheHuman! I'm sorry for taking so long to write it.