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The Mage's Tower



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Tue May 10, 2016 6:54 pm
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Mageheart says...



The Mage's Tower

Rebooted!


After a very successful summer that was full of reviews, I finally have gotten back into reviewing! My goal when reviewing is to give constructive criticism while also highlighting all of the wonderful things in your work. If that's the type of review you're looking for, you've come to the right mage. If it's not, I suggest checking out some of the other threads in this forum!

All that I ask is that you request your story using the format that I posted down below, and that you don't request reviews for the following types of works: ones that are 18+ for reasons other than violence or language, poetry or chapters of novels that are not chapter one. The only exception to the last rule is if I read the previous chapters.

I hope that my reviews can help you improve your writing!

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Wed May 11, 2016 2:31 am
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yizhongt says...



Hey there, could you please review:

Starlight: Chapter 2 (Part I)

If it's not too much to ask, could you also review the second part of Chapter II as well?

Thanks in advance !
  





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soundofmind says...



I lowkey want to dump a whole book on you for you to review (300+ pages in google docs) but that seems like something for your "devouring books" phase and I'm also a flip floppy blob who can't decide on what I want you to review
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Wed May 11, 2016 8:23 pm
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Your review is done, @yizhongt! :D

When you decide what needs reviewing, @soundofmind, you know who to message. :D
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queer and here.
  





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Wed May 11, 2016 8:41 pm
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AnarchyWolf says...



Hi Magestorrow. May I request a review for this chapter one of something I'm working on?

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Your review is done @AnarchyWolf!
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Thanks for the reviews @Magestorrow! Really appreciate it. Could you please review:

Starlight: Chapter 3 (Part I)

Thanks in advance!
  





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Mageheart says...



You're welcome, @yizhongt! I was worried my reviews weren't going to be good enough. Speaking of reviews, yours is done! :D
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Sat May 14, 2016 2:22 am
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yizhongt says...



Thanks for the review @Magestorrow! Could you please review:

Starlight: Chapter 3 (Part II)

Thanks in advance!
  





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Sat May 14, 2016 10:44 am
Mageheart says...



I'm busy this weekend, @yizhongt, but I'll try to review it as soon as possible.
mage

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roleplaying is my platonic love language.

queer and here.
  





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Sun May 22, 2016 2:41 pm
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Hey @Magestorrow, thanks for the reviews you've made. Really appreciate them! If time permits, could you please review:

Starlight: Chapter 4 (Part II)

Thanks in advance!
  





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Mageheart says...



I'd be happy to! :D It might take awhile, but I promise to review it as soon as I can!
mage

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Mon May 30, 2016 6:22 pm
Leekeer says...



I need a review done and dusted. I just crave that Feedback!
I had this when I was an angst filled teenager who kind of liked storytelling. I still the feel the same except for the angst
  





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I'd be happy to do it, @Leeker. It just might take awhile because I'm busy for the next two weeks. Could you please post the link here?
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Sun Jun 26, 2016 2:32 pm
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Your review is done, @yizhongt! :D
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roleplaying is my platonic love language.

queer and here.
  








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