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Fri Oct 06, 2017 6:35 pm
Jyva says...



Kyllorac wrote:Hello there! I don't believe I've ever gotten a review from you, so let's change that.

Keep Driving

I'd be particularly interested in your impressions of the overall tone of the piece, as well as your interpretation of what is actually going on in the story.


done
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Mon Nov 20, 2017 1:15 pm
ChocoDanish says...



i need help with my tenses n my pace. pick whichever u like

Beginning (part1)
Family and Friends (part2)
Fluffs (part3)
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Sat Jan 20, 2018 8:35 pm
camusic says...



please review this Seltas's first kill I'd rather brutally honest then well not.
  





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Wed Jan 24, 2018 10:41 am
Jyva says...



Kyllorac wrote:Hello there! I don't believe I've ever gotten a review from you, so let's change that.

Keep Driving

I'd be particularly interested in your impressions of the overall tone of the piece, as well as your interpretation of what is actually going on in the story.


done
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Fri Mar 30, 2018 11:34 pm
manilla says...



You could review my "Danser" series.

"Danser" Pt. 1
From the wild manila folder of YWS's office.

When the last tree has fallen
And the rivers are poisoned
You cannot eat money


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Mon Apr 09, 2018 6:12 pm
eiaeh9 says...



Please review my piece Butterflies Out of the Wings at Ballerinas Out of the Wings
Many thanks
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Mon Apr 09, 2018 6:16 pm
eiaeh9 says...



Please review my piece Butterflies Out of the Wings at Ballerinas Out of the Wings
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Sun Apr 15, 2018 6:58 am
MasterAvi says...



Eyyy can you review my prison escape introduction and chapter 1 please? Be very harsh I want to improve!
The Running Man Introduction and Chapter 1
  





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Sun Apr 15, 2018 1:51 pm
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MasterAvi wrote:Eyyy can you review my prison escape introduction and chapter 1 please? Be very harsh I want to improve!
The Running Man Introduction and Chapter 1


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Sun Apr 15, 2018 1:56 pm
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camusic wrote:please review this Seltas's first kill I'd rather brutally honest then well not.


forgot to mark this as done
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Tue Feb 26, 2019 3:30 am
Jyva says...



reviving this thread, i got new stuff to post which means i gotta do some reviews qq
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Thu Nov 21, 2019 4:45 am
Miraculor77 says...



So I'm kinda scared to ask for a review from you, but here goes anyway. I' writing a novel called Code: Delete, which seems to fall under realistic teen fiction with dystopian elements. It's set in the future. I have two chapters below that I want some feedback on:

Chapter 12: Footprint

Chapter 14: Coffee


You don't have to do both; if you could do even one I would really appreciate it.

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Fri Nov 22, 2019 7:03 am
Jyva says...



Miraculor77 wrote:So I'm kinda scared to ask for a review from you, but here goes anyway. I' writing a novel called Code: Delete, which seems to fall under realistic teen fiction with dystopian elements. It's set in the future. I have two chapters below that I want some feedback on:

Chapter 12: Footprint

Chapter 14: Coffee


You don't have to do both; if you could do even one I would really appreciate it.

- Mira



did 12.

almost forgot this thread existed lol
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Fri Dec 06, 2019 7:19 pm
Miraculor77 says...



Hello again! I would really appreciate it if you could review my essay draft. I did it for school and am in desperate need of feedback, so feel free to get as nitpicky as you want. :)

Comparison between Fahrenheit 451's Society and Ours - an essay
I'd rather die than live without passion.
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Wed Jan 22, 2020 7:18 pm
CassieList says...



I will except your challenge! Could you review Entry one/?: Little Miss Horror Show for me? It would be much appreciated so i can move onto how to fix the next chapter!

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