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Sat Jan 14, 2017 4:44 pm
AlyTheBookworm says...



Please tear this to shreds! :D
Genre: Fantasy, Dramatic
Length: 6,133-or-so words
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Fri Mar 03, 2017 12:30 am
skylnn00writes says...



Hey, so I was just wondering if you could review my work? I'm trying to get as much feed back as I can before I go back and take each sentence apart to edit with all the reviews. It would really mean a lot to me even if you don't get through everything, I know its long... one chapter will make me a happy camper :smt001 Thank you!

Here is the link:
(Undecided) #1: Ch. 1-5
~Sky <3
  





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Thu Mar 09, 2017 7:43 pm
Saruka says...



I have an intro to a series I'm most likely going to continue, and I'd like feedback. If you have a suggestion, don't not put it in because you're being polite.
But I guess that's what this thread is about, isn't it? :wink: https://www.youngwriterssociety.com/work.php?id=134410

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Thu Mar 09, 2017 8:05 pm
zaminami says...



Can you do some of my writing? You only need to do one, and I think that a good, thorough review is what I need. Here are the two stories I need to have reviewed more:

Ding Dong Part 1: Jamie

My Legacy 1: Swallowed Prologue

Thanks!

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Mon Mar 13, 2017 6:40 pm
Lily708 says...



Hey Jyva!!
I would like some real hard review for my work -First Day of Junior High.

First Day of Junior High.

That's the first chapter of the book I'm presently writing. So I'm open to any kind of criticism,suggestions or ideas.Please do go through it during your free time...it's not a lengthy one though.

Thanks in advance:)
  





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Tue Mar 21, 2017 6:30 pm
theknight says...



hi jyva i was wondering if you could please do a review on my chapter one of my book if that would be possible.
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Wed Mar 29, 2017 8:55 pm
zaminami says...



Can you review my works?-- My Legacy 1: Swallowed Prologue, My 2 Sentence Horror Stories, and Ding Dong Part 1: Jamie. Thanks! This would be really helpful.
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Mon Apr 03, 2017 9:40 pm
Dracula says...



Untitled (Zombie Apocalypse Romance Short) please!
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Mon Apr 17, 2017 1:26 am
mavisknightley says...



Hi Jyva,

I have requested reviews from you in the past, and enjoyed your feedback so much I just had to return. :)

This is a personal narrative/essay style piece that I know needs quite a bit (ok, ALOT) of doctoring, but I feel strongly about it and would love to hear any advice you may have for improving it.

There is literally no structure to it, I kind of just threw up words all over my keyboard.

Could you maybe take a look at it please?

Insanity, Yugiyoh, and Breaking Up... Adventures in Discovering Myself.

Thanks so much for your time.

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Thu Apr 20, 2017 7:15 am
LilyRose says...



Hi I would really like reviews for my realistic short story The Other Side it's for a short story writing competition and has to be submitted by tomorrow so I need it done asap thanks smxx
  





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Thu Apr 20, 2017 2:58 pm
Aaraju says...



Hi. I would like an honest review for my article.
This is the link.
https://www.youngwriterssociety.com/work/Aaraju/An-Unfulfilled-Dream-135138

Thank you very much.
  





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Sat Sep 30, 2017 4:39 pm
Jyva says...



bump, i'm back
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Tue Oct 03, 2017 11:56 pm
DogFruit says...



Hi! I think what my writing needs is some cold hard advice. Plus I'm trying to get better at accepting constructive criticism... Go at it!
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Wed Oct 04, 2017 11:50 am
Jyva says...



DogFruit wrote:Hi! I think what my writing needs is some cold hard advice. Plus I'm trying to get better at accepting constructive criticism... Go at it!


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Fri Oct 06, 2017 2:31 pm
Kale says...



Hello there! I don't believe I've ever gotten a review from you, so let's change that.

Keep Driving

I'd be particularly interested in your impressions of the overall tone of the piece, as well as your interpretation of what is actually going on in the story.
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