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Fri Jun 10, 2016 2:22 am
Jyva says...



Elesium wrote:My writing could use some brutal honesty, it helps me very much.

Here's a link if you'd be willing to review.

In the Eyes of a Demon


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Fri Jun 10, 2016 5:30 pm
artbyandream says...



My writing is in need of some brutal honesty! It would really help if you could review this first chapter.
River Dreams Chapter One: What the darkness carries
  





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Sat Jun 11, 2016 1:14 am
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artbyandream wrote:My writing is in need of some brutal honesty! It would really help if you could review this first chapter.
River Dreams Chapter One: What the darkness carries


you've saved it as a draft, i can't see it.
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Tue Jun 14, 2016 10:03 am
Desdemona says...



Hi :)

I really need someone to review my series. There's two chapters so far so it shouldn't take too long...

How the Marigold Lost its Sun

There's the link to the first one, the second one is on the corner.

Don't hold back, and thanks a lot in advance! :)

With thanks and love,
Des
Excuse you, I'm your friggin' queen!

Don't take it too hard when you lose to me, I always win.


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August 1, 2015 - April 21, 2016: BlackCatXx
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Wed Jun 15, 2016 12:02 pm
Jyva says...



Desdemona wrote:Hi :)

I really need someone to review my series. There's two chapters so far so it shouldn't take too long...

How the Marigold Lost its Sun

There's the link to the first one, the second one is on the corner.

Don't hold back, and thanks a lot in advance! :)

With thanks and love,
Des



did the first one.
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Thu Sep 08, 2016 8:37 am
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bump. i'm back, haven't been writing for a while, and need something to get me back into it.
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Tue Sep 20, 2016 6:12 pm
Chibigirlygamer says...



Hello! I just want you to review one thing!
It's a script. About a page or two long and has only three characters talking the whole time. I want a general review please.

Here it is:
Friends? (Basic version)

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Wed Sep 21, 2016 9:24 am
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you made the thingy private, so i can't see it.
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Mon Oct 10, 2016 1:57 am
mavisknightley says...



Hello Jyva,


I am submitting this poem for a scholarship contest, and could really use some feedback. Whatever you have time for would be wonderful, but I'd really appreciate a through shredding of this piece. Be brutal! I can take it. :)

It was written about a friend of mine, who recently lost her son.

See link here: Mournings After


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Mon Oct 10, 2016 3:01 am
Jyva says...



donerino
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Sun Nov 20, 2016 4:19 pm
ashlingwolf says...



Hello! I wouldn't call myself the best writer, particularly since I've been absent for a little while. I could use some brutally honest reviewing on the first few chapters (I only have three up, the fourth coming in a couple days) of my story Four- I recently edited and reposted the first and second chapters, so it would be great to get some new feedback. I don't really care which chapter/chapters you review, but if you want to review a later one, please read up to that. If you don't have the time, that's ok. Here they are:

Four- Chapter one
Four- Chapter two
Four- Chapter three
  





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Mon Nov 21, 2016 3:11 am
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ashlingwolf wrote:Hello! I wouldn't call myself the best writer, particularly since I've been absent for a little while. I could use some brutally honest reviewing on the first few chapters (I only have three up, the fourth coming in a couple days) of my story Four- I recently edited and reposted the first and second chapters, so it would be great to get some new feedback. I don't really care which chapter/chapters you review, but if you want to review a later one, please read up to that. If you don't have the time, that's ok. Here they are:

Four- Chapter one
Four- Chapter two
Four- Chapter three



did chapter one
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Tue Nov 22, 2016 3:44 pm
BeTheChange says...



Could you please review at least chapter one of my novel? I'll let you decide whether to continue after that.
Chapter One: Cove
  





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Sun Dec 04, 2016 11:02 am
Lord Anziu says...



Hey Jyva!
Would you kindly shred this to utter pieces?
I have some problems with my writing after getting back on the horse for the first time in 3 years, which I started by editing this old project of mine (also the one that I have somehow fleshed out in my mind)

Gods and Kings: Fury of the Desert- chapter 1- ongoing
Formerly known as Lord Anzius, now returned as Lord Anziu... But just call me Anzius like everyone else.
  





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Mon Dec 05, 2016 12:01 pm
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Lord Anziu wrote:Hey Jyva!
Would you kindly shred this to utter pieces?
I have some problems with my writing after getting back on the horse for the first time in 3 years, which I started by editing this old project of mine (also the one that I have somehow fleshed out in my mind)

Gods and Kings: Fury of the Desert- chapter 1- ongoing


oh whoops, forgot to reply. done
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