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Tue Dec 06, 2016 7:52 am
dracowave says...



Hey Jyva I have a story named Return to Oblivion Draft that i would like to be thoroughly eviscerated. I am definitely not a great writer and i dont have a definitive writing style but perhaps some harsh criticism will help. Thanks
  





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Wed Dec 21, 2016 2:11 am
Dracula says...



This please! Follow The Stars (Edited)
I bought a cactus. A week later it died. I got depressed because I thought Damn, I am less nurturing than a desert.
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Wed Dec 21, 2016 7:38 pm
ElvenJedi says...



Would you mind reviewing Chapter 1 of the story I just started? What I need is a brutal review rn. Here it is: Chapter 1

I understand if you're too busy and I don't mind if it's after Christmas sometime, but I would TOTALLY appreciate it! Thanks!
“I warn you, if you bore me, I shall take my revenge.”
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Thu Dec 22, 2016 5:35 am
Jyva says...



dracowave wrote:Hey Jyva I have a story named Return to Oblivion Draft that i would like to be thoroughly eviscerated. I am definitely not a great writer and i dont have a definitive writing style but perhaps some harsh criticism will help. Thanks


done - again, sorry for the late response.
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Thu Dec 22, 2016 6:06 am
Jyva says...



Dracula wrote:This please! Follow The Stars (Edited)


done. not bad :)
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Thu Dec 29, 2016 5:05 am
Jyva says...



ElvenJedi wrote:Would you mind reviewing Chapter 1 of the story I just started? What I need is a brutal review rn. Here it is: Chapter 1

I understand if you're too busy and I don't mind if it's after Christmas sometime, but I would TOTALLY appreciate it! Thanks!


done
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Sun Jan 01, 2017 1:01 am
maisewriting says...



Hi!
If you don't mind, could you please take a look at the first chapter of my novel? It's the first thing I've posted on here and I'd love some feedback :) Tear it apart, don't hold back.
Thank you so much!
  





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Sun Jan 01, 2017 2:36 am
Jyva says...



maisewriting wrote:Hi!
If you don't mind, could you please take a look at the first chapter of my novel? It's the first thing I've posted on here and I'd love some feedback :) Tear it apart, don't hold back.
Thank you so much!


@maisewriting you've saved it as draft, cant view it
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Sun Jan 01, 2017 5:20 am
maisewriting says...



Jyva wrote:
maisewriting wrote:Hi!
If you don't mind, could you please take a look at the first chapter of my novel? It's the first thing I've posted on here and I'd love some feedback :) Tear it apart, don't hold back.
Thank you so much!


@maisewriting you've saved it as draft, cant view it



hey!
sorry about that, i'm still figuring out how to work this site aha :)

you should be able to view it now?
  





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Sun Jan 01, 2017 11:14 am
Jyva says...



CarryOnMrCaulfield wrote:Let's see how brutal you really are. Tear me the hell apart. I'm a big boy, so don't you dare go easy on me. Got it? :)

The Carpenter - Exordium of Shattered Crowns

Sally - Chapter One of Shattered Crowns

Wylfred - Chapter Two of Shattered Crowns

The Duchess - Chapter Three of Shattered Crowns

The King of Winter - Chapter Four of Shattered Crowns

Daegar - Chapter Five of Shattered Crowns

The Third Son - Chapter Six of Shattered Crowns

Don't sugarcoat anything. As much as I like praise, I need an actual review.



did chapter one. uh... have fun.
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Tue Jan 03, 2017 11:46 am
Jyva says...



maisewriting wrote:
Jyva wrote:
maisewriting wrote:Hi!
If you don't mind, could you please take a look at the first chapter of my novel? It's the first thing I've posted on here and I'd love some feedback :) Tear it apart, don't hold back.
Thank you so much!


@maisewriting you've saved it as draft, cant view it



hey!
sorry about that, i'm still figuring out how to work this site aha :)

you should be able to view it now?


aye, done
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Sat Jan 07, 2017 8:54 pm
Dest says...



Are you still doing these? Do you think you could review mine? https://www.youngwriterssociety.com/work.php?id=133380
  





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Mon Jan 09, 2017 11:33 pm
inktopus says...



I'd like a review on either of the two chapters I have posted of my novel, though the second only has one review at the time I'm writing this. I'll post both links though in case you'd rather review the first chapter.

Scolopendra
Scolopendra chapter 2
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Tue Jan 10, 2017 7:44 am
Jyva says...



Dest wrote:Are you still doing these? Do you think you could review mine? https://www.youngwriterssociety.com/work.php?id=133380


done
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