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dracowave wrote:Hey Jyva I have a story named Return to Oblivion Draft that i would like to be thoroughly eviscerated. I am definitely not a great writer and i dont have a definitive writing style but perhaps some harsh criticism will help. Thanks
maisewriting wrote:Hi!
If you don't mind, could you please take a look at the first chapter of my novel? It's the first thing I've posted on here and I'd love some feedback Tear it apart, don't hold back.
Thank you so much!
Jyva wrote:maisewriting wrote:Hi!
If you don't mind, could you please take a look at the first chapter of my novel? It's the first thing I've posted on here and I'd love some feedback Tear it apart, don't hold back.
Thank you so much!
@maisewriting you've saved it as draft, cant view it
CarryOnMrCaulfield wrote:Let's see how brutal you really are. Tear me the hell apart. I'm a big boy, so don't you dare go easy on me. Got it?
The Carpenter - Exordium of Shattered Crowns
Sally - Chapter One of Shattered Crowns
Wylfred - Chapter Two of Shattered Crowns
The Duchess - Chapter Three of Shattered Crowns
The King of Winter - Chapter Four of Shattered Crowns
Daegar - Chapter Five of Shattered Crowns
The Third Son - Chapter Six of Shattered Crowns
Don't sugarcoat anything. As much as I like praise, I need an actual review.
maisewriting wrote:Jyva wrote:maisewriting wrote:Hi!
If you don't mind, could you please take a look at the first chapter of my novel? It's the first thing I've posted on here and I'd love some feedback Tear it apart, don't hold back.
Thank you so much!
@maisewriting you've saved it as draft, cant view it
hey!
sorry about that, i'm still figuring out how to work this site aha
you should be able to view it now?
Dest wrote:Are you still doing these? Do you think you could review mine? https://www.youngwriterssociety.com/work.php?id=133380
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