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Wed Apr 20, 2016 6:59 am
Jyva says...



i will be thorough.

i will be honest.

narrative writing is preferred - i don't do much poetry.
Last edited by Jyva on Sat Sep 30, 2017 4:38 pm, edited 5 times in total.
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Thu Apr 21, 2016 8:50 pm
AnarchyWolf says...



Hey Jyva.

I've read a few of your reviews and they are, as you say, thorough. I think a brutal, honest review is what my writing needs?

I'm not going to ask you to review the whole load of chapters from my story, but could you read through either chapter two or chapter three? (Not both. I feel like that'd be too much to ask)

Chapter two is
Wolf and Aristocrat: Chapter Two

and

Wolf and Aristocrat: Chapter Three

-AnarchyWolf
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Fri Apr 22, 2016 8:35 am
Jyva says...



AnarchyWolf wrote:Hey Jyva.

I've read a few of your reviews and they are, as you say, thorough. I think a brutal, honest review is what my writing needs?

I'm not going to ask you to review the whole load of chapters from my story, but could you read through either chapter two or chapter three? (Not both. I feel like that'd be too much to ask)

Chapter two is
Wolf and Aristocrat: Chapter Two

and

Wolf and Aristocrat: Chapter Three

-AnarchyWolf


i've done chapter 3, since it didn't have any reviews yet
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Fri Apr 22, 2016 5:51 pm
Attolia says...



Hi Jyva,

I almost wrote you off (no capitalization + the all-too-familiar, cocky "I'll rip your stuff apart"), but then I read your reviews. I'm glad I did.

I would be very grateful if you could review this:

Untitled, Chapter One

I'm not that attached to it. I wrote the second chapter first; this one was a bit of a chore but had to be written.

Thank you!
  





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Sun Apr 24, 2016 1:17 am
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Attolia wrote:Hi Jyva,

I almost wrote you off (no capitalization + the all-too-familiar, cocky "I'll rip your stuff apart"), but then I read your reviews. I'm glad I did.

I would be very grateful if you could review this:

Untitled, Chapter One

I'm not that attached to it. I wrote the second chapter first; this one was a bit of a chore but had to be written.

Thank you!


done. took like two damned hours to do >:(
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Mon Apr 25, 2016 2:04 am
Attolia says...



Thank you again! Haha don't worry I won't make you review the next chapter, but I do appreciate your thorough review. Let me know if I can ever help you with anything in return. :)
  





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Thu Apr 28, 2016 11:36 pm
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So, I'd love to have a simple, thorough, honest review. I've had a couple reviewers do my work, but some of them I feel are filled with a bit too much glitter. Think you could give me a hand?
Words Written in Lightning: Chapter 1
Words Written in Lightning: Chapter 2
Words Written in Lightning: Chapter 3
Words Written in Lightning: Chapter 4
Words Written in Lightning: Chapter 5
"Red is the color of fate, right?"
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Sat Apr 30, 2016 1:18 am
Jyva says...



BlueJayWalker10 wrote:So, I'd love to have a simple, thorough, honest review. I've had a couple reviewers do my work, but some of them I feel are filled with a bit too much glitter. Think you could give me a hand?
Words Written in Lightning: Chapter 1 [Original Draft, Absolute Garbage]
Words Written in Lightning: Chapter 2
Words Written in Lightning: Chapter 3
Words Written in Lightning: Chapter 4
Words Written in Lightning: Chapter 5


im gonna do chapter 5, since it's the one with the least reviews - but it's not going to be till after sunday, cause im saving my energy for review day
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Tue May 03, 2016 11:15 am
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Jyva wrote:
BlueJayWalker10 wrote:So, I'd love to have a simple, thorough, honest review. I've had a couple reviewers do my work, but some of them I feel are filled with a bit too much glitter. Think you could give me a hand?
Words Written in Lightning: Chapter 1 [Original Draft, Absolute Garbage]
Words Written in Lightning: Chapter 2
Words Written in Lightning: Chapter 3
Words Written in Lightning: Chapter 4
Words Written in Lightning: Chapter 5


im gonna do chapter 5, since it's the one with the least reviews - but it's not going to be till after sunday, cause im saving my energy for review day


@BlueJayWalker10 done
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Thu May 05, 2016 6:14 pm
guineapiggirl says...



Hello Jyva!! I would appreciate any reviews of my poems. I think I can take some quite harsh criticism. This is I think the best of the crop so I'd love tips on improving it: Architects

I'd also really like feedback on this: Women
or this: Friday Uprising if you've got time.

Thank you in advance!
  





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Sat May 07, 2016 1:55 pm
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guineapiggirl wrote:Hello Jyva!! I would appreciate any reviews of my poems. I think I can take some quite harsh criticism. This is I think the best of the crop so I'd love tips on improving it: Architects

I'd also really like feedback on this: Women
or this: Friday Uprising if you've got time.

Thank you in advance!


i done did it
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Sat Jun 04, 2016 2:16 pm
felistia says...



Hi, Felistia here. :D

I would really like you to review my novel please.
It's a fantasy, action\adventure novel. It is a slight fanfic to the Wings of Fire series, but you don't need to know anything from those books to be able to read the story. I just need someone to treat it just like a book. Ignore the fanfic. :D
I really need someone to go through all the chapters please. :D
https://www.youngwriterssociety.com/work/felistia/The-Quest-for-Fire-Book-One--Into-the-Mists-Chapter-1-124445
Thanks for your time
  





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Sun Jun 05, 2016 1:44 pm
Jyva says...



felistia wrote:Hi, Felistia here. :D

I would really like you to review my novel please.
It's a fantasy, action\adventure novel. It is a slight fanfic to the Wings of Fire series, but you don't need to know anything from those books to be able to read the story. I just need someone to treat it just like a book. Ignore the fanfic. :D
I really need someone to go through all the chapters please. :D
https://www.youngwriterssociety.com/work/felistia/The-Quest-for-Fire-Book-One--Into-the-Mists-Chapter-1-124445
Thanks for your time




done
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Tue Jun 07, 2016 10:32 pm
Elesium says...



My writing could use some brutal honesty, it helps me very much.

Here's a link if you'd be willing to review.

In the Eyes of a Demon
  





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Wed Jun 08, 2016 4:35 pm
Maricore says...



Hello!
I would like some slaughtering for the the novel I'm writing, I need to make those perfect!
Show no mercy please.
Black Contamination_ chapter 1: our silent farewell
Black Contamination_ chapter 2: A new start
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