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Deanie's Reviewing Business II



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Tue Jan 26, 2016 2:29 am
Charm says...



I wrote a poem. It's the first one I've written in a long time and I don't think it's that good. I would love to here what you think and I'd love to be given some advice: "I Would Kill Myself"
  





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Sun Jan 31, 2016 9:42 am
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@Lightsong, I reviewed your poem School Kids even though you changed things! I thought because it was taking me so long to get to things I'll just throw it in as extra ;)
Trust in God and all else follows.

Deanie, dominating the world since it was cool @Pompadour, 2014
Your username reminds me of a hotdog @Stegosaurus, 2015
Tried to make puns out of your username, but every attempt has been Deanied @Candywizard, 2015
  





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Sun Jan 31, 2016 10:44 am
Deanie says...



@InfiniteRectangles, I am done with your poem!
Trust in God and all else follows.

Deanie, dominating the world since it was cool @Pompadour, 2014
Your username reminds me of a hotdog @Stegosaurus, 2015
Tried to make puns out of your username, but every attempt has been Deanied @Candywizard, 2015
  





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Sun Jan 31, 2016 11:52 am
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@Lightsong, I reviewed your other poem too now ;)
Trust in God and all else follows.

Deanie, dominating the world since it was cool @Pompadour, 2014
Your username reminds me of a hotdog @Stegosaurus, 2015
Tried to make puns out of your username, but every attempt has been Deanied @Candywizard, 2015
  





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Sun Jan 31, 2016 12:41 pm
Sins says...



It's Britney bitch.

Jk, it's me.

So basically, I've decided to re-post the edited version of The Boy Who Broke Mirrors (always such a mouthful to type), and as someone who read the original version it would be super appreciated if you could take a look at the edited version. The first chapter isn't majorly different, and I'm not sure at which edited stage you actually read it, but I'd really appreciate your feedback on it!

The Boy Who Broke Mirrors (Chapter One)

Please and thank you! :3
I didn't know what to put here so I put this.
  





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Fri Feb 12, 2016 4:57 am
Deanie says...



@MissGangamash I'm done with your extract and am slowly gonna keep working through your novel! While also reviewing other things :3
Trust in God and all else follows.

Deanie, dominating the world since it was cool @Pompadour, 2014
Your username reminds me of a hotdog @Stegosaurus, 2015
Tried to make puns out of your username, but every attempt has been Deanied @Candywizard, 2015
  





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Tue Feb 16, 2016 10:01 pm
Meerkat says...



Hi there! Would you kindly review my poem Mon Dernier Amour?
Thank you very much for your time.
"Sometimes it is better to light a flamethrower than curse the darkness." –Terry Pratchett
  





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Thu Feb 18, 2016 1:33 pm
na3f says...



Hi Deanie,

I would be thankful if you could please review the first chapter of a novel I just started:

work/na3f/Brother-Moon-Sister-Sun--Chapter-1-127285
  





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Fri Feb 19, 2016 2:29 am
dracowave says...



Hi Deanie how are you I have a novel Named the Seven Heavenly Kings that I have been working on for a while and I would really appreciate if you could review it for me. A few people have reviewed already and I made some changes based on the advice they have given me and would like to see if there are any more improvements that can be made. Thank you for your time. The Seven Heavenly Kings Revamped
  





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Wed Mar 02, 2016 9:58 pm
BlueJayWalker10 says...



Hey! I'm Jay Walker. I'm really unsure as to how good all my works are, though I already have a couple reviews on my works. I love to as many opinions as possible. (I really value other people's opinions.)
If possible, I'd like for you to all four chapters of Words Written in Lighting, but it's okay if you only do the first chapter.
Words Written in Lightning is a Action/Adventure Fantasy Novel.
The first chapter is here:
Words Written in Lightning: Chapter 1
Second chapter:
Words Written in Lightning: Chapter 2
Third chapter:
Words Written in Lightning: Chapter 3
Fourth chapter:
Words Written in Lightning: Chapter 4
Thanks!
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Thu Mar 03, 2016 6:27 am
Deanie says...



@BellaRoma just writing your last review now. Then I'll be finished with your works, so let me know when you post the last part!
Trust in God and all else follows.

Deanie, dominating the world since it was cool @Pompadour, 2014
Your username reminds me of a hotdog @Stegosaurus, 2015
Tried to make puns out of your username, but every attempt has been Deanied @Candywizard, 2015
  





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Thu Mar 17, 2016 11:51 am
Lightsong says...



Hey, please review Bad Lights, Good Lights [Chapter 8.3]! :D
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The subject is a catalyst, a character, but our responsibility is, has to be, to the work."

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Fri Mar 18, 2016 1:36 am
WritingWolf says...



You didn't specify if you review shorts or not... Would you mind doing this one for me?

Treasure Every Moment

EDIT: I revised it, here's the new version.
The Seer and the Griffin Tamer
Last edited by WritingWolf on Thu Mar 24, 2016 12:08 pm, edited 1 time in total.
~You can only grasp what you reach for~
  





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Sat Mar 19, 2016 10:16 pm
NerdBird says...



Hello Deanie!

I'd love it if you could review the first chapter of my novel False Gods. It's a YA/ Sci-Fi about a hacker who bites off a little more than she can chew! :)

False Gods - Sunday Bloody Sunday (Chapter 1)

Thank you! Thank you! Thank you!
:D
  





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Tue Mar 22, 2016 7:58 pm
Lightsong says...



Request cancelled.
"Writing, though, belongs first to the writer, and then to the reader, to the world.

The subject is a catalyst, a character, but our responsibility is, has to be, to the work."

- David L. Ulin
  








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