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Fri Jan 06, 2017 11:38 am
maisewriting says...



Hey all!
Can someone please review the first chapter of my novel called Axylia, the story of a Fae girl who is raised as a human, forced to flee the human city Kelir for fear of persecution, and then gets caught up in a whole lot of conflict between the three races of their world.
Thanks!
  





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Sun Jan 08, 2017 4:21 am
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Featherstone says...



Not sure what this is, exactly, but I'd like some reviews: The White Rose
"All that is gold does not glitter,
Not all those who wander are lost;
The old that is strong does not wither,
Deep roots are not reached by the frost."

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Thu Jan 12, 2017 10:13 pm
shima says...



Well, would like a review for my try-hard way too edgy fanfic about Doctor Who that is so DARK and MATURE.
  





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Sun Jan 15, 2017 1:16 am
Satira says...



I would like a review on Farcry:1 . I only received one review for it, and would like some more criticism/input. Thank you in advance!
"if only, if only,"
the woodpecker sighed,
"the bark on the trees
were as soft as the skies."
  





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Thu Jan 19, 2017 11:01 pm
shima says...



Again me (coming often here, aint I). Would like a review for my "Letter from Utopia." Looking for advice on how to make it sound more forced/propaganda-esque and how to insert a second meaning into it.
  





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Wed Feb 01, 2017 10:06 pm
shima says...



Emmm...well...this is awkward. Do you guys have major rules against double-posting ? Anyways here I am, requesting a review for my second god, the god of travel.
  





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Tue Feb 21, 2017 6:03 pm
verba4scriptor says...



hi! would you be so kind as to review the first chapter of my story

Evil's Affection: Chapter 1
History will be kind to me for I intend to write it!
  





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Thu Feb 23, 2017 6:28 pm
ChildOfNowhere says...



Let's just drop this in here and see what happens. These Brilliant and Beautiful Lies: Ch1

I'd like honest reviews that point out the things that can be changed, please c:
Writer of words; doodler of forest sprites


  





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Fri Feb 24, 2017 12:27 am
SkyeDreamer says...



Hi y'all! How are you? I'd love if you would review my narrative about love in an age of undefined relationships. Thank you, thank you, thank you!!

Love in a Photograph
~Please review me~
*Want a review? Just ask!*
  





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Tue Feb 28, 2017 3:24 am
skylnn00writes says...



If someone would please read and review this, it would really mean a lot to me. I am looking for grammar, plot, characters, structure, just anything and everything. I attached a link below. Thank you so much in advance!

(Undecided)
~Sky <3
  





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Sun Mar 05, 2017 3:50 pm
zaminami says...



Hi. I'm Kara Stevens. I'm a new writer and I need a lot of help. My first story, My Legacy 1, is the first one that I've put online publicly. If you guys can review it and tell me CONSTRUCTIVE criticism (emphasis on the constructive) it'll be great.

My Legacy 1: Swallowed Prologue

I'm warning you, My Legacy contains some language so if you have a problem with that don't read it.

Thanks!--

Kara
Reigen apologist. Anime enthusiast.
Come talk to me about Saiki K and Jojo’s!
LGBTQ+ SUPPORTER
I review all things.
First member of the bio trio™.
5'2", lesbian, and ready to throw down.
  





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Thu Mar 09, 2017 7:38 pm
Saruka says...



This is my first work as a user, about a girl named Samy who's being bullied and challenged about her sexuality. There is, however, a trigger warning because of
Spoiler! :
the knife that Samy used to cut her wrists and draw blood because of how extremely depressed and hopeless Samy thinks that she is. This may be triggering to those who are sensitive to blood and weapons.
Other than that, my work would be entirely appropriate. I'd love it if someone could review it and give me tips on what to improve. Thanks!
https://www.youngwriterssociety.com/work.php?id=134410

~
Saruka
a lesbian disaster
  





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Wed Mar 29, 2017 6:15 am
Featherstone says...



May I get some reviews on what I've got of Huntress (the edited version) so far?

Here are the links:

Huntress: Chapter 1- Pack [Edited; LMS]

Huntress: Chapter 2.1- Pride [Edited; LMS]

Huntress: Chapter 2.2- Pride [Edited; LMS]

Huntress: Chapter 2.3- Pride [Edited; LMS]

Huntress: Chapter 3.1- Kennel [Edited; LMS]

Thanks,

Fea
"All that is gold does not glitter,
Not all those who wander are lost;
The old that is strong does not wither,
Deep roots are not reached by the frost."

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Fri Mar 31, 2017 5:41 pm
Silberfee says...



Twice the foreigner

Please review even if to comment that its bad bc then I can have peace :)
  





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Sat Apr 01, 2017 3:05 pm
SacredPen says...



I'm working on a long-term personal writing project that I'd appreciate help on. I have a lot of insecurities - no, doubts, rather - about my writing style and story composition.

This is it:

Project Rose Petal: Chapter 2 - The Consumption of Seeds
"I do suppose we take those."
"Nothing is sacred to the eyes of vengeance."
"Anger and sorrow are both a trigger pull away from ending. Just depends on who you aim at."
  








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